The Bridge of Nowhere

Trigger Warning.

The Bridge of Nowhere

 

Shrouded in mist, even the rail lights failed to illuminate the darkness of our hearts

The chilly night refused to warm the coldness of our worlds

How empty were the streets at this hour, a green flag to the broken ones

Silent gods lay in wait, come to me, whispered the waves

 

Mother mother, would you approve?

Your misery is now mine to end

A dead wrist watch, time ceased to exist

I will grow not older, nor any wiser

Miss me if you must

I will not carry that burden

 

The souls of my predecessors accompany me

take my hand, lamented my friend

And take I did.

 

pat pat pat

pat pat pat

 

whimpering beast, why do you stare

 

bark bark bark

bark bark bark

 

Tiny creature, why do you care

Have my coat if that is your desire

What need of it do I have, in the land of the passed

 

lick lick lick

lick lick lick

 

Let’s go find you some food then,

This bridge will go nowhere.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Mary Helda]

The first 4 lines really did a number on me...they were enough to get me sad...a broken man who still cares and gives the little that he has....he did stir up different emotions in me....wonderfully penned...

[Eliot Knight]

Thankyou, I'm glad it resonated with you

[Mary Helda]

my pleasure

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

The tone of this reminds me of the book entitled, "The Giving Tree." From beginning to end, the tree gives everything that it has until nothing remains but a stump; and even that, he offers up as a place for the little boy - now an old man - to sit and rest. It follows the travails of the two from early childhood to old age until, at the end, they are bone weary. One a consummate giver, the other a consummate taker: both inseparable from the other. Here, in your poem, I feel complete and utter despair. I don't know what heavy wings have burdened this young man's back. Still, he finds enough compassion to feed his furry friend ... a giver still when he thought he had nothing left to give. Wonderful!

[Eliot Knight]

I am humbled by your response, thankyou.

[Tomoe Tellez]

This poem holds a very interesting story behind just a few lines, I had to read it twice, but it seems that depending on the person who reads we will all see it differently, some will see what you meant to write but only if they know or can relate to it. It reminded me of the poems they put in language arts textbooks in school. Nice job!

[Eliot Knight]

Thankyou for that very accurate review, I did write it with a story behind it but people did see it from different perspectives so it's pretty open to interpretation as you said. WOW! that's so sweet of you to say! thanks!

[Tomoe Tellez]

You're welcomed!

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem. Each set of lines create vision and thoughts. I liked the use of repetition. Gave strength and balance to the story. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry. I liked the ending.
Coyote

[Eliot Knight]

Thankyou for that insightful comment.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[daninstockholm]

interesting but vague,, I'm incilned to read it numerous times to see if it clears up,, I love what you do and the images you use, but it's tough for me to get through,, I do see the suicide references and i like how you portray them, deep dark,, interesting!!

[Eliot Knight]

I'm not sure if the vagueness comes from the lack of description, since I usually have a picture in my mind and I fail to get it across or it's a part of my style of writing, since many of them are pretty obscure. Thank you for the review, appreciated as always.

[Gee]

Well Eliot that went flying straight over my rather thick head!!!!

[Eliot Knight]

I wonder if everyone will feel the same way lol, let's wait and see!

[Gee]

I'd say not,if it doesn't smack me in the face telling me what it is I've had it!!!

[Eliot Knight]

I will let you know if they dont get it either haha