I Remember

I remember the city

I remember the lights

I remember her face

I remember the fight

The smell of burning rubber

The crash of two cars

The heat of fire

The end of her spark

 Begging her to wake

Hearing her last breaths

Crying because on this day

She became Death’s

Tears of people dressed in black

As she is passed

And of all the flowers in her grave

I placed the last

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Sad places, you took the reader with in the words. You described the accident and final place to say good bye. Some scene of a life. Become a permanent part of us. Thank you Evelynn for sharing the powerful words and thoughts.
Coyote

[Evelynn]

Thank you so much!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[jaywolf1738]

I love your poem. It has such deep meaning even though it is not long. It doesn't a lot of words to express a feeling, and you have showed me that in this poem

[TravisT]

Thanks for sharing. Very emotional poem, I could tell it really means something to you.

[Chris]

Wakes, viewings, and services... remembrances all.

[Faith Knoll]

Wow... you never cease to amaze me! I just got in a pretty bad car accident last week so this piece especially connects to me.

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Quiet dramatic story in poem. Very clear picture what was happen and how you feel about it. Very honest and strong.

[Hbrook]

*sobs* this is very sad and touching! Waaa! And arguement right before a death! Always the worst thing!

[davidramos12344]

dang this poem is sad. I like it.

[Evelynn]

thank you!

[Elizabeth]

wow, this was really heartbreaking. you could feel the emotion coming from the poem. loved it

[Evelynn]

Thanks! I really appreciate it!

[Tony Jordan]

This is good - it would be even better if you reworked the third stanza - the impact of the fourth is completely dowsed by the declaration - "She became Death’s"...which is a pity because the fourth carries the whole poem Evelynn

[Evelynn]

Thanks, I totally see what you mean.