I Remember

I Remember

A Poem by Evelynn

I remember the city
I remember the lights
I remember her face
I remember the fight

The smell of burning rubber
The crash of two cars
The heat of fire
The end of her spark

 Begging her to wake
Hearing her last breaths
Crying because on this day
She became Death’s

Tears of people dressed in black
As she is passed
And of all the flowers in her grave
I placed the last


© 2017 Evelynn



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Sad places, you took the reader with in the words. You described the accident and final place to say good bye. Some scene of a life. Become a permanent part of us. Thank you Evelynn for sharing the powerful words and thoughts.
Coyote

Posted 11 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

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Evelynn

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much!
Coyote Poetry

10 Months Ago

You are welcome.



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I love your poem. It has such deep meaning even though it is not long. It doesn't a lot of words to express a feeling, and you have showed me that in this poem

Posted 6 Months Ago


Thanks for sharing. Very emotional poem, I could tell it really means something to you.

Posted 10 Months Ago


Wakes, viewings, and services... remembrances all.

Posted 10 Months Ago


Wow... you never cease to amaze me! I just got in a pretty bad car accident last week so this piece especially connects to me.

Posted 10 Months Ago


Quiet dramatic story in poem. Very clear picture what was happen and how you feel about it. Very honest and strong.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

*sobs* this is very sad and touching! Waaa! And arguement right before a death! Always the worst thing!

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

dang this poem is sad. I like it.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Evelynn

11 Months Ago

thank you!
wow, this was really heartbreaking. you could feel the emotion coming from the poem. loved it

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Evelynn

11 Months Ago

Thanks! I really appreciate it!
Sad places, you took the reader with in the words. You described the accident and final place to say good bye. Some scene of a life. Become a permanent part of us. Thank you Evelynn for sharing the powerful words and thoughts.
Coyote

Posted 11 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

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Evelynn

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much!
Coyote Poetry

10 Months Ago

You are welcome.
This is good - it would be even better if you reworked the third stanza - the impact of the fourth is completely dowsed by the declaration - "She became Death’s"...which is a pity because the fourth carries the whole poem Evelynn

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Evelynn

11 Months Ago

Thanks, I totally see what you mean.

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Evelynn
Evelynn

Roanoke, VA



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