Blame

Blame

A Poem by Evelynn

We were stuck in this endless cycle 
That was ripping us both apart 
My eyes were always filled with tears 
And you were breaking your own heart 
We would fight and come right back 
Like we were addicted to the pain 
But we would forget the hurt, the tears, the ache 
So we could go dancing in the rain 
But after a while you had enough 
You were done with me and the hurt 
I understood but it broke my heart 
It broke me when you left me in the dirt 
I still see you every time I turn around 
And I can’t help bit wish things were still the same 
But I knew it’s wrong for me to pray 
Because in the end. I am the one to blame 

© 2019 Evelynn


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Wow, very thought-provoking. you inspire me

Posted 1 Month Ago


What a heartbreaking poem...very expressive and sure to hit the hearts of many readers

Posted 2 Months Ago


wow wow wow this hit home to me on so many levels
this is wonderful i really enjoyed the read, sad though it is, thanks for entry into the competition and good luck

Posted 2 Months Ago


Evelynn

2 Months Ago

thank you so much
Juliespenhere

2 Months Ago

no worries thanks again
Good expression of your feeling ;-] Very relatable poem.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Evelynn

2 Months Ago

thank you so much
This speaks to so many of the relationships in my life. " stuck in this endless cycle" . Far too often, even when we see the pattern, we still fight for something we hoped for. ~Jim

Posted 3 Months Ago


oh I wasn't ready for that... I was thinking the ole you b*****d poem filled with angst and insult by the title. This is all sincerity and truth and so beautiful a sentiment. I jumped right in and felt your pain and recognized my blame in past transgressions and dropped a tear in its unfolding. Heavy sigh and bunny embrace to you in a most familiar feeling. A very well written rhythm and rhyme piece of poetry here. Thank you for your sharing

Posted 3 Months Ago


i bet there's a lot of ppl that can relate to this touching write

Posted 3 Months Ago


This is wonderful in essence. The theme, the message, the killer of a kicker!! The imagery! Where it falls flat is in musicality and a couple of places where words shouldn't be repeated. Examples: "But we would forget the hurt, the tears, the pain" (too many syllables here. Take out either "hurt", "pain", or "tears"); "You were done with me and the hurt" (the repetition of "hurt" here is awkward, for it's more powerful in the earlier line, but the line itself is also awkward in flow, which makes the "dirt" line equally awkward). Play with it a little more. This has great potential.....but it's not yet a gem.

Posted 3 Months Ago


You express your feelings really well. Great one.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Evelynn

3 Months Ago

Thank you!
Najam Us Saher

3 Months Ago

You're welcome.
Excellent piece, Evelynn. It's always a risk to open your heart to someone, and love can be quite a painful journey. I loved the poignant imagery you created in each line, very well done.

-Derekv

Posted 3 Months Ago


Evelynn

3 Months Ago

Thank you!

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