A colours choir sang vibrantly

A colours choir sang vibrantly

A Poem by Gee
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Spring

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Heads bowed as if in deference
the daffodils they swayed,
whilst dappled light through dancing trees
upon the lush grass played.

A bluebell sea rolled silently
to fallow fields yet sown,
o'er which in coming warmer months
a yellow quilt be thrown.

The thin veiled mists of early morn'
that washed the world with white,
cede to the over eager sun
days ever warm and bright.

A colours choir sang vibrantly
from life that bloomed anew,
to celebrate the birth of Spring
now another winter through.



© 2017 Gee



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A you tease! Spring seems like land far off and stormy seas to cross to get there still. But we can dream as you paint what IS to come Gee.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Gee

1 Month Ago

Thank you John
Beautiful poem, the promise of spring.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Gee

1 Month Ago

Cheers....
Sometimes I wish that I could leave less than twenty-five freaking characters as a review (or perhaps a simple emoji)....for I can't think of anything to say about this except.........wow!

(....."days ever warmer, bright".....this is a great line, only, I can't help but pick out the small detail of "days ever warmER" ultimately meaning "bright" would become "brighter"....however "days ever warm [and]"....that's what would elicit "bright"....gotta have some concordance in your words....or it's not only incorrect grammatically, it sounds rather awkward). Well done!!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Gee

5 Months Ago

Thank you, changes made. It is good that you both enjoy and improve my scribbles when you visit. Thi.. read more
Simple stuff from a simple mind you say. My arse!
This follows a tradition and adds immesurably to it.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Ken Simm.

5 Months Ago

Nah that doesn't work either.
Ken Simm.

5 Months Ago

See me after prep.
Gee

5 Months Ago

Mmmmmmmmm, guess I'm just lucky the right words sometimes fall in a pleasing way..
There is something very exciting when the flowers appear. It's like the sign for, take some lairs of clothes off. If only nature could keep the garden clean over the winter.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Gee

5 Months Ago

Cheers Paul
Almost Robert Frost-ery. Very nice. ..."bluebell sea". That's a new description of the deep blue sea and perfect for this ode to spring.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Gee

5 Months Ago

Oh Mr Frostery, if only. Thank you
oh man! so glad i found this one! nothing about it wants "changing" ;) a delight to read and experience ..in gratitude for spring, nature and your poem ..very fine stuff says i!
E.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Gee

6 Months Ago

Cheers E glad you approve
Einstein Noodle

6 Months Ago

;) .......................
Your submission is now read in the http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Nature%2C-Auroras%2C-Lights%2C-Trees%2C-Water%2C-Outdoors-Contest/54059/ please stay tuned for the winning poems. Thank you for your entry.

Posted 6 Months Ago


As lovely and enchanting an homage to Spring as I've yet heard, your pen's voice is gilded with sheer wonderment of Nature's heavenly glory.
In beautiful 8/6/8/6 Ballad tempo and a jaunty iambic beat, your lines and verses embrace the mind's-eye and emotions' soul on a vivid poetic journey, not soon forgotten.
A wee few issues spotted by the artist's eye to consider: L1, kick out one of the "in"s. V3L4, make "ever" "e'er" to improve flow and follow the 6-count. V4L3, make "spring" "Spring" … as, in its use 'tis a proper noun; whereas, "winter" is simply "another" winter.
Whom, with an ounce of warm blood pumping their veins, would not love such a heart dancing title, and every verse stands as its own virtual poetic masterpiece; not withstanding, the amazing imagery blessed throughout verse three, and the entirety of your poem's life-giving breath.

An amazing piece, Gee … I love it dearly and thank you sincerely! ⁓ Richard : )

Posted 7 Months Ago


Gee

7 Months Ago

Thank you Richard, corrections made review greatly appreciated
Richard

7 Months Ago

You're very welcome,
It's a wonderful work, Gee … I've read through it several times; truly.. read more
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Sky
A bluebell sea rolled silently
to fallow fields yet sown,
o'er which in coming warmer months
a yellow quilt be thrown.

I loved those stanzas the most. "Spring" is always special no doubt...

Posted 7 Months Ago


Gee

7 Months Ago

Cheers Sky. Yep my favourite season

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