Softly ~ in my dreams... (loneliness)

Softly ~ in my dreams... (loneliness)

A Poem by Richard
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Kyrielle

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Softly ~ in my dreams...


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Days turn to pain I cannot show,
nights into ever-endless streams.
Reaching to find I'm lonely; though,
I’ll hold you Softly
~
in my dreams.
:
My days, now empty without you,
to nights, no peace will come, it seems;
your touch I ache the long night through,
I'll hold you Softly
~
in my dreams.
:
Where's gone your shelter for my storm,
what of love spent ... in lifetime schemes,
when all turns cold, who'll keep me warm?
I'll hold you Softly
~
in my dreams.
:
Who'll grasp the beauty of my mind;
then, thrill my body to extremes,
or take my hand when I am blind?
I'll hold you Softly
~
in my dreams.
:
When scared, no one to hold me tight.
Oh, I shall know what life redeems ...
when all else dims, you'll be my light.
I'll hold you Softly
~
in my dreams.

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Richard W. Jenkins
©2015




                                 Kyrielle                               

The Kyrielle is a French form written in Quatrain verses.
Each Quatrain contains a repeated final line or phrase as a refrain.
There is no limit to the number of verses, but three is generally the minimum.
Normal rhyme structure is a/a/b/B, c/c/b/B, d/d/b/B, etc; with B being the refrain line.
Alternate structure is a/b/a/B, c/b/c/B, d/b/d/B, etc; with B being the refrain or repeated line.
It has an iambic meter, composed of eight syllables (4 feet) per line, but line lengths can be by author's choice.


© 2017 Richard



Author's Note

Richard
Painting: "Lonely" in oils, by Sergei Chepik
If you would like to try this beautifully expressive form and need help, just let me know.
It can be used for any emotion, mood, or topic.

Constructive (well meant) comments and criticism are always welcome! : )

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I love new things and I had never heard of a 'Kyrelle before so great to discover this. This form seems well suited to your theme here Richard and the 'refrain line' for me is a powerful means of getting the feeling across. Sgain a well chosen image that blends so well with the writing

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Months Ago

Thank you most gratefully, George! : )
Yes, the Kyrielle is both a beautiful and challenging .. read more
George Coombs

3 Months Ago

Your welcome richard



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I love new things and I had never heard of a 'Kyrelle before so great to discover this. This form seems well suited to your theme here Richard and the 'refrain line' for me is a powerful means of getting the feeling across. Sgain a well chosen image that blends so well with the writing

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Months Ago

Thank you most gratefully, George! : )
Yes, the Kyrielle is both a beautiful and challenging .. read more
George Coombs

3 Months Ago

Your welcome richard
I love it when a writer takes it to the next level. The extra work you spent on presentation was well noted. And to educate the less seasoned writers on structure is also admired. Now lets go back to the poem...ache, I think many of us can relate to that familiar ache. When we loath the day...and we can only find peace in dreams. Where love is pain, and in that same love we find refuge. Once more all I can say is "ache" beautiful words. Thank you so much for sharing.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

5 Months Ago

Beautifully spake, Dear Lady-Poet! : )
Brightly conscious, your words express a far deeper gr.. read more
+she plays with matches+

5 Months Ago

It was honestly my pleasure to read you. Have you every thought about creating your own syllable cou.. read more
Richard

5 Months Ago

You're fun to share with, Beth ; )
I very much like your rhyme scheme, and might give it a wh.. read more
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Bec
Feel like I'm dreaming myself right now.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

5 Months Ago

Thank you, Bec,
It is nice to know my work has had this effect on you.

Blessin.. read more
I read this to my poetry group, yesterday. They were all impressed. You might have made some new fans!
I would likeyour help on writing a Kyrielle on the subject of 'acceptance' There are still things in my life that I need to 'accept' before I can put them in a cubby hole of my mind to rest easy.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

5 Months Ago

As you wish.
Eight syllables (or 4-poetic feet) Iambic is:
deDUM deDUM deDUM deDum
Great Aunt Astri

5 Months Ago

Got it! And the last word of the refrain has to be able to rhyme unaffectedly with quite a lot? I t.. read more
Great Aunt Astri

5 Months Ago

message would not go through. So here is my attempt at the first verse;-
'Some things were ha.. read more
Kyrielle ... what a very complicated form. However did you manage to write such a deep poem with such an evocative, yet simple, ambience? I suppose it is the repeated refrain that holds it together so well.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

5 Months Ago

I suppose most anything that is new can appear to be complicated, but once learning it and actually .. read more
Such a touching piece of writing, it broke my heart and sums up beautifully the heartache of love lost...beautiful painting compliments this work so well.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

6 Months Ago

Again, KT,
You grace my pages with your special touch of inspiring loveliness!
That my.. read more
KT-B

6 Months Ago

I'm glad - thank you - it was my pleasure truly :)
I love this piece the use of imagery is so profound. The tone of this poem evokes ones deepest emotions. You are a great writer.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Richard

6 Months Ago

(my first comment didn't take?)
How beautifully, Kimiko, your words reach in to speak gently .. read more
Kimiko Watson

5 Months Ago

You are welcome :)
This a very touching piece especially because I'm thousands of miles away from my each week for the lass ten years. So here you have conveyed the sentiment of my often thoughts and of countless others who have found true love. For this we thank you.

Posted 6 Months Ago


It is I who has returned to "grasp the beauty of your mind" and again delve into this beautifully written but sad piece of poetry. A very lovely but heartbreaking piece you have again shared my dear Sir. 🌹 Angelheart

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Months Ago

Thank you Angel, ever-so dearly.
The warmth and expressed appreciation and enjoyment in your .. read more
Richard

3 Months Ago

Er, "hugs" to you! ; )

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