Softly ~ in my dreams... (loneliness)

Softly ~ in my dreams...

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Days turn to pain I cannot show,
nights into ever-endless streams.
Reaching to find I'm lonely; though,
I’ll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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My days, now empty without you,
to nights, no peace will come, it seems;
your touch I ache the long night through,
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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Where's gone your shelter for my storm,
what of love spent ... in lifetime schemes,
when all turns cold, who'll keep me warm?
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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Who'll grasp the beauty of my mind;
then, thrill my body to extremes,
or take my hand when I am blind?
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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When scared, no one to hold me tight.
Oh, I shall know what life redeems ...
when all else dims, you'll be my light.
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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Richard W. Jenkins
©2015

1st Place Winner

FanStory International

Kyrielle Contest

                                 Kyrielle                               

The Kyrielle is a French form written in Quatrain verses.
Each Quatrain contains a repeated final line or phrase as a refrain.
There is no limit to the number of verses, but three is the required minimum.
Normal rhyme structure is a/a/b/B, c/c/b/B, d/d/b/B, etc; with B being the refrain line.
Alternate structure is a/b/a/B, c/b/c/B, d/b/d/B, etc; with B being the refrain or repeated line.
Mine is in iambic meter, composed of eight syllables (4 feet) per line, but line length is author's choice.

Author's Note

Painting: "Lonely" in oils, by Sergei Chepik
If you would like to try this beautifully expressive form and need help, just let me know.
It can be used for any emotion, mood, or topic.

Constructive (well meant) comments and criticism are always welcome! : )

Reviews

[June bug]

Where's gone your shelter for my storm,
what of love spent ... in lifetime schemes,
when all turns cold, who'll keep me warm?
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.

WOW!! I love this part, this is a wonderful write. I like your image you used as well
very nicely written

[Richard🖌]

Hi, JB 🐞

With such an effulgent review as yours, why would I want another? And, that you love anything about my humble poetry, think it's wonderful, and nicely written certainly sets the page warmly aglow.

Thank you you ever-so gratefully for gifting a smile! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Amy R]

I liked the way you wrote this poem, very sweet yet sad, but very interesting.
Loved the way it rhymes and flows so nicely together.

[Richard🖌]

Ohhh-MY, Amy💥

Do you realize this is the fifth read 'n review in a row you've gifted this hopefully humble bard!"
I'm gobsmacked by all the attention, but grateful beyond words for every nuance of praise, expressed enjoyment, and inspired encouragement you've bestowed.

I cannot thank you enough for sharing with me.
Happy smiles 'n warmest hugs! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Amy R]

Aww, yes, when I enjoy poems,
I can read at least 6-8 in a row. Just know you write great, and I'd be around to review many more.
Again, You're welcome my friend`

[Carola]

a sweet but sad-ish poem.
i read your poem as you would normally,
then re-read each stanza's 2nd line only, & then each 3rd line only.
it was fascinating 'cos it was like reading 3 separate poems.
richard your poetic gymnastics seem limitless! ....wonderful.
cheerio carola

[Richard🖌]

Hi there, Lovely Carola Dear 🎀
I wish you loads of holiday cheer.
May your heart smile soft 'n true,
warmly embraced all season through.

What a lovely review for this rather wistfully forlorn poem.
Ya know, M'Dear? I never thought of taking certain lines from this piece to discern what they would be like, and you're absolutely right: The 2nd lines and third lines of each verse really do make two additional poems. How creative of you to discover this … you're the first I've known to; it makes a more fascinating read for me, too.

Thank you ever-so gratefully for sharing this one with me, Lady Carola, for your wonderful compliment, and for thinking it's wonderful.

My warmest holiday hug for You! ⁓ Richard 😏

[Carola]

hello richard
thank you for your kind reply.
i had another read of your poem, & i forgot to mention the other 'hidden' poem, by reading the 1st line of each stanza.

so you now have 1 regular poem & 3 'hidden' bonus poems making a total of 4 poems in all !! ..... a good result i would say for one writing effort.

richard, i wish you a wonderful festive season with family & friends, a happy new year & a clear blue sky.
cheerio carola

ps. when you can spare the time after your festive season is over, i would be grateful if you could review my memoir "memories of my pacific ocean crossing in an MU-2B....it's about a 1 hours read.

[Lisasview]

Hi Richard,
As I have a few minutes... nearly 10pm here...
I found a lovely poem of yours I had not yet read.
And, this one was just the perfect one for me. for me to read ... right now.
To hold thoughts in your dreams, this thought drew me in and I found myself rereading your poem over and over again.
There is something so sad and gentle about your words ... Somehow, I feel as though this poem exposes some deeper part of you.... A feeling of desire or is it yearning? ... is captured in your words... Then, hidden behind your words one can feel your heart.
Loved it!!!
Lisa... Oh yes, and of course the most amazing image...

[Richard🖌]

Hi yourself, Dear Lisa 🤗

Don't you think it's amazingly impressive how an insightfully alert reader can glimpse and so fully perceive a writer's inner essence, feelings, and emotions merely from the simplicity of their words, as you've so explicitly elucidated and expounded upon mine, merely through the verbiage of this unique Kyrielle form poem.
Yours, the review most any bard could hope for when composing and sharing his wares.

Blessings 'n hugs of warmest thanks, Dear Lady-Poet! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Lisasview]

Oh goodness another of my reviews that got lost "in the shuffle" so glad it suddenly appeared!!
read moreOh goodness another of my reviews that got lost "in the shuffle" so glad it suddenly appeared!!
Sadly your response of 13 minutes ago is not all there?
weird..
But you are of course welcome..
Lisa

[Lisasview]

Hi Richard,
Just to let you know... I just went back and the rest of your sweet comment regarding my review showed up...Wow, what a lovely and true comment it is.
Lisa

[Richard🖌]

I've run across about a dozen (so far) I got no notice on from when the site went down and the administrators were working on "stuff" like preventing us from sharing emails and having to press "I'm not a robot" when saving new poems to post. At one time, our color pallet was fully functional until they "adjusted" things a bit no telling what will come next, but using the site is free to its members … so, what's really to gripe about, eh?

[Richard🖌]

Oh, Yeah!
And, the "Floating X" suddenly appeared.

[lovelymarina]

What a piece to read while enduring heartbreak... sadly soon the memories fade and all you can do is see them in your dreams once in a while, if you can be so lucky. This hurt in the most beautiful way.
Marina

[Richard🖌]

Lady Marina ✍

Your gently compassionate, knowing words convey such a richness in sincere understanding, a bard is left awash in the flame of their strikingly brilliant rapport.

You touch so softly … warmly, Marina ⁓ Richard🍃

[Tate Morgan]

Very well done Perfect rhyme and meter I’m really impressed

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Mate🍷

To receive such an accolade from one of the most skilled and sought after writers onsite is more than a humble bard could have expected … but, I'm keeping every word. : )

Thank you, Tate … you're a gracious friend! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Caroline B A Maguire]

As always I'm drawn in by the title and have chosen well. You have such a way with romantic verse it makes me wonder on your muse? First love perhaps? 😉 I would hate to break another's heart yet would love to evoke a great passion like this in someone..although it seems the greatest love is the one that we lose..
So sad 😞well deserved first prize..bravo ! 😁 xo

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Sweet Caroline 🥀

Heretofore, my most creative muse has been a seemingly depthless reservoir of fertile imagination, but I'm always open for an alluring influence to stimulate new dimensions of fervor to fill my ever-willing pen. ; )
Thank you ever-so warmly, M'Dear, for your much appreciated and desired praise, but most of all, for commenting on and sharing this rather poignantly alluring piece with me.

My warmest to Thee ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Silmara McGarry]

Wonderfully written from start to finish. Such elegance to this poem that truly involves and captivate the readers, from the most simple one to the most demanding. Each stanza takes us to a depth of feelings that can feel really familiar because many of us could have felt the same at some point in ours lives. The dreamy energy was deeply felt by me, as if I was watching trough a movie what the character was wishing/ dreaming but for same sad reason could not have.
You as always dear Richard "The Best"!!!!
Great picture to much the amazing poem.
And Congratulations for wining first place in the contest, very well deserved!!!

I hope all is well dear
See you :-)))

[Richard🖌]

Ya know, Lady Sil? 🍂

There are rare few who come even close to grasping the full essence of my poetry, as You do … from the first, you've always blessed me with the feeling of kinship, of melding through our poetry in very special ways. At times, it's almost as though we were inside each other … a most beauteous sensation to contemplate, wouldn't you say? ; )
From your expressed harmony with this piece, it's as though you could almost have written it, yourself … uncanny, in a good way.
Thank you for your praise, your expressed relatability, and for your always blissful presence.

All is well with me, as you know I wish for you, Sil, m'dear … it's been wonderful sharing this rather poignant piece with You.
With my warmest hugs! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Silmara McGarry]

Thank youuu!

[Richard🖌]

You are most welcome, Sil : )

[Relic]

Excellent writing as always, Richard. Eack lines flows into the next with perfect rhythm. The emotion is conveyed well. I'm not surprised it won first place. :)

[Richard🖌]

Thank you most gratefully, Tim 🍂

Your effulgent words of praise and observation to the details of this award winning piece are gracious and appreciated, in a most gratefully humbling way.

I hope your day is as joyful as you've made mine! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Kerra]

Where's gone your shelter for my storm,
what of love spent ... in lifetime schemes,

Outstanding lines here, Love this part so much, what a wonderful and beautiful write you have penned

[Richard🖌]

Thank you ever-so gratefully, Kerra☀️

The lines you've highlighted are among my favorites, too.That you love anything about my poetry makes a weary heart smile.
Your gracious accolades are as caresses to a bards soul, too … muah!

Love your new avatar, BTW 😏 ⁓ Richard 🍃