Softly ~ in my dreams... (loneliness)

Softly ~ in my dreams...

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Days turn to pain I cannot show,
nights into ever-endless streams.
Reaching to find I'm lonely; though,
I’ll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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My days, now empty without you,
to nights, no peace will come, it seems;
your touch I ache the long night through,
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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Where's gone your shelter for my storm,
what of love spent ... in lifetime schemes,
when all turns cold, who'll keep me warm?
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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Who'll grasp the beauty of my mind;
then, thrill my body to extremes,
or take my hand when I am blind?
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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When scared, no one to hold me tight.
Oh, I shall know what life redeems ...
when all else dims, you'll be my light.
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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Richard W. Jenkins
©2015

1st Place Winner

FanStory International

Kyrielle Contest

                                 Kyrielle                               

The Kyrielle is a French form written in Quatrain verses.
Each Quatrain contains a repeated final line or phrase as a refrain.
There is no limit to the number of verses, but three is the required minimum.
Normal rhyme structure is a/a/b/B, c/c/b/B, d/d/b/B, etc; with B being the refrain line.
Alternate structure is a/b/a/B, c/b/c/B, d/b/d/B, etc; with B being the refrain or repeated line.
Mine is in iambic meter, composed of eight syllables (4 feet) per line, but line length is author's choice.

Author's Note

Painting: "Lonely" in oils, by Sergei Chepik
If you would like to try this beautifully expressive form and need help, just let me know.
It can be used for any emotion, mood, or topic.

Constructive (well meant) comments and criticism are always welcome! : )

Reviews

[June bug]

Where's gone your shelter for my storm,
what of love spent ... in lifetime schemes,
when all turns cold, who'll keep me warm?
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.

WOW!! I love this part, this is a wonderful write. I like your image you used as well
very nicely written

[Richard🖌]

Hi, JB 🐞

With such an effulgent review as yours, why would I want another? And, that you love anything about my humble poetry, think it's wonderful, and nicely written certainly sets the page warmly aglow.

Thank you you ever-so gratefully for gifting a smile! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Zahra]

this is so beautifully done, totally loved the art and form you used.

[Richard🖌]

I humbly and gratefully bow in the warm blessing of your words, Zahra … I cannot thank you enough for selecting this poignant little piece for your first taste of my poetry.
You honor me so! ⁓ Richard

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Your words and poetry are aspirational. Every time I read your work, I see beauty. I feel beauty. I touch beauty. It graces my soul. Lovely!

[Richard🖌]

Dear Linda,
I have missed the lovely touches of your sweetness and praise upon my page, as long after you've gone your afterglow lingers, gratifying my earnest efforts, assuring that if one as accomplished as you are finds my work so soul-touchingly beautiful, I know I've, indeed, done something worthwhile by composing and sharing.
Bless you, Dear Lady-Poet, for your inspiring praise and wondrous presence! ⁓ Richard

[Roland Petrov]

Beautiful! I shall have to try the Kyrielle. Am I correct that you did not use the normal structure? Looks like you did a/b/a/B.

[Richard🖌]

Blush!
You always say the nicest things, Roland. : )
I am truly happy you will try this lovely form, for every time you try a new form I am rewarded with a wonderfully enjoyable piece from your ever-amazing pen.
I have corrected the faux pas on the form requirement, so it is the ordinary I was unwittingly making the unordinary … LOL!
Thanks so much, My Friend! ⁓ Richard

[Roland Petrov]

My attempt is posted under Beer is Proof. It's spiritual.

[Richard🖌]

LOL!
I'll bet.

[Richard🖌]

It's about "spirits", that is.

[A. Amos]

You Sir are a champion of words, feelings and emotions were on top level. I was lost and I honestly want the world to read your work. Simply awesome and thank you for sharing your work...

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Sir Amos, for your wonderfully gratifying praise and humbling commentary on my poetic prowess … I can imagine no more inspiring words to receive from a fellow-poet of your caliber.
Bless you, My Fine Friend, for your thoughtful generosity and enjoyment of my efforts! ⁓ Richard

[pink elephant]

Nice poem... I liked it a lot...😊

[Richard🖌]

Your comment is nice, too, and I liked it a lot … thanks! ⁓ Richard

[silverwritinggoddess]

This was sad and beautiful at the same time! Very touching. Hope to read more of your work! Excellent work!

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Sweet Jennifer,
Your words of enjoyment, understanding, and praise have, indeed, warmed and assured me we've connected through the auspices of this poignant poem.
I, too, hope you will read more of my humble efforts, Dear Lady-Poet! ⁓ Richard

[Willard Wells]

Beautiful work Richard Such expression of missing love and your dreaming of having your love by your side. Sometime even just a memory of someone we love can get us through another day. Well done.

[Richard🖌]

Williard,
Again, My Fine Friend, you've taken your time to read and comment on one of my little efforts with your wise and discerning skills to delve into the human spirit and understand so clearly and deeply.
It is truly a pleasure to write and share with you, Willard … thanks again! ⁓ Richard

[Willard Wells]

Thank you kind sir for your kind words. My comments only reflect the quality of your work.

[annalysiar]

Its soft and lonesome. The painting suits it well. Its a well painted image your poem, pleasurable and true

[Richard🖌]

How humbled I am that you've selected another of my efforts to read and review for me … how honored and grateful I am, My Friend.
Thank you ever-so graciously … bless you, Annar! ⁓ Richard

[annalysiar]

You are more than welcome old friend, its an honor to read your poetry

[Adam Adams]

Love's itself one light to heart that kindles its beat to death, no matter whether it's lighted to fantasy or love-seen in dreams, love oft. belongs to fantasy that comes.. stairs down to reality "with time" as long as dreams are pure but the heart's not. The metaphor of your poetry capturing the things of his heart or saying things alive in his dreams to his lover of heart that how he feels 'bout her every singular time her scents cross his breath. Rhythmically fascinating poetry!

[Richard🖌]

You know, Adam?

Off and ion the site fails to let me know I've received a review and I'll not know it until, by chance, I run across it while perusing for something else … your review is one of those; though, admittedly, I cannot recall ever missing one for "SEVEN YEARS!!!"
And, a very good review, indeed, and what a treat finding it.

Thank you so very much for reading my work and leaving such an insightfully keen understanding of it, too! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Adam Adams]

Hey Richard, just re-visited the site again - and see it has been almost 7 years - Quite unbelievable. How fast the time has moved. No?

Would love to continue reading your work if i choose to come active again on this site. Hope things are fine on your end.

[B]

Its amazing
after he is gone
everything is boring now

and everything changed
in ways i do not enjoy

[Richard🖌]

Oh, Dear Sweet Lady-Poet,
I know and feel your loneliness, your sadness, and lack of excitement and arousal for life.
Write a wonderful poem … it is said some of the most amazing poems are written in moments of deepest joy or sadness.
Take this piece, for instance … it was derived from the loss of a dear loved-one, of whom I was extremely fond, but know they will never return.

No better therapy is our poetry, eh?
Smiles 'n hugs of tender warmth to you, Nisreen! ⁓ Richard

[B]

yeah
nothing like writing .....

[Richard🖌]

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