Softly ~ in my dreams... (loneliness)

Softly ~ in my dreams...

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Days turn to pain I cannot show,
nights into ever-endless streams.
Reaching to find I'm lonely; though,
I’ll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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My days, now empty without you,
to nights, no peace will come, it seems;
your touch I ache the long night through,
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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Where's gone your shelter for my storm,
what of love spent ... in lifetime schemes,
when all turns cold, who'll keep me warm?
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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Who'll grasp the beauty of my mind;
then, thrill my body to extremes,
or take my hand when I am blind?
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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When scared, no one to hold me tight.
Oh, I shall know what life redeems ...
when all else dims, you'll be my light.
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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Richard W. Jenkins
©2015

1st Place Winner

FanStory International

Kyrielle Contest

                                 Kyrielle                               

The Kyrielle is a French form written in Quatrain verses.
Each Quatrain contains a repeated final line or phrase as a refrain.
There is no limit to the number of verses, but three is the required minimum.
Normal rhyme structure is a/a/b/B, c/c/b/B, d/d/b/B, etc; with B being the refrain line.
Alternate structure is a/b/a/B, c/b/c/B, d/b/d/B, etc; with B being the refrain or repeated line.
Mine is in iambic meter, composed of eight syllables (4 feet) per line, but line length is author's choice.

Author's Note

Painting: "Lonely" in oils, by Sergei Chepik
If you would like to try this beautifully expressive form and need help, just let me know.
It can be used for any emotion, mood, or topic.

Constructive (well meant) comments and criticism are always welcome! : )

Reviews

[June bug]

Where's gone your shelter for my storm,
what of love spent ... in lifetime schemes,
when all turns cold, who'll keep me warm?
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.

WOW!! I love this part, this is a wonderful write. I like your image you used as well
very nicely written

[Richard🖌]

Hi, JB 🐞

With such an effulgent review as yours, why would I want another? And, that you love anything about my humble poetry, think it's wonderful, and nicely written certainly sets the page warmly aglow.

Thank you you ever-so gratefully for gifting a smile! ⁓ Richard🖌

[alan peter kelly]

When I get home after a long day and sometimes half the night surrounded by and fully immersed in the trials, tribs, paradigms of a mass with whom, as artist, i have never completely felt at ease, serene and/or all four tyres aligned I am of mind which reads how much more lonely it would be without me for company.

[Richard🖌]

Interesting review, Alan.
Thanks for sharing a bit of your life … I am glad something in my poem inspired you to.

Blessings 'n btight holiday cheer! ⁓ Richard

[Cobblestone Traveler]

The structure in this poem is lovely; the rhyming flows very nicely. Beautiful poem.

[Richard🖌]

(something is wrong, as the Comments box will not allow my comments for your review to be displayed correctly … final try)
Thank you ever-so kindly for your praise and expressed appreciation of this truly poignant poem.
Gratefully yours! ~ Richard

[Cobblestone Traveler]

You're welcome! It was my pleasure.

[horizon]

The description about what is kyrielle helped me to know new thing...thank you for that additional information you added...

[Richard🖌]

You are most welcome.
Perhaps, now, you will compose a Kyrielle of your own … it can be about any topic you wish. ⁓ RJ

[horizon]

Okk...thank you...ill definitely try...

[Richard🖌]

Please, let me know when you've posted your Kyrielle, so I can read and review it for you, okay? : )

[horizon]

Yaa sure sir...

[horizon]

This poem gives the feel of sadness pouring from heart...the pain of loosing the person who meant everything to you...the place got empty after that person which cannot be filled again..the importance of the person..the need of that person...is clearly depicted...wonderfully carved...touched me I felt it...

[Richard🖌]

Welcome, Poet!
Your words let me know you understand this writing, and that we've connected through it on a meaningful level.
Such is the highly rewarding gratification for an olde bard's labors … thank you sincerely! ⁓ Richard

[horizon]

My pleasure sir

[ReedWrite]

Awww...a different feel to this one. The sadness. The loss. The emptiness. And yet...there's hope. You cling to it, if only in your dreams. Beautiful. The words speak with their own voice...demanding attention...wrenching emotion...touching an answering chord in the reader. Such a lovely gift you've given us with this one, Richard. Thank you.

[Richard🖌]

What enthrallingly inspiring words to read, Dear Poetess 🥀

Just look at how long it's been since you sent them to me to revel in and fawn over … goes to show that sincerely deep feelings, thoughts, and emotions, such as yours here, never lose their value and meanings.

No doubt, the site never sent notice you'd read and reviewed this sadly poignant poem, but I am thrilled to be so warmly embraced by your graciously beautiful expressions of appreciation and gratitude.

You've a most charming way about you I'm thankful I didn't miss miss … thank you for You!⁓ Richard 🍃

[Susan 🦋]

I can't tell you how many times Iv'e read this...and it always gets to me

[Richard🖌]

Yeah, it is a sad one, alright!

Thanks for the read.

[Angelheart1]

Dear Sir Richard, I felt the loneliness, pain and also the deep love that you have written within the words of this most lovely romantic poem.

Tears began flowing from my eyes as I read the sadness that only one who has experienced this in real life could ever write of and which then allows the reader to feel all the raw emotions deep within their core. Though it is very sad your words and presentation makes it a gorgeous piece of poetry and I truly loved it.

I hope that that this poem was only an exercise in showcasing your talent as a poet vs a true real life experience that you've write of.

I'm unable to visit the site often but when I do I always am able to find such beautiful words to satisfy me until I am able to visit you again. I had seen your account closed message and hoped that you'd be back so I am very happy to find you back and sharing your words as promised Mr Richard. 🌹Angelheart

[Richard🖌]

Dear Angelheart 👼

What can I possibly say to you of meaningful expression, appreciation, emotional feeling, and praise you've not already shared with me(?) … I'd be hard-pressed to.

it's so very true what you say about beauty and sadness … I read somewhere that there is a certain kind of intrinsic beauty in sadness.
I take it to emphasize how not all sadness brings us down, that some we actually need in order to cleanse our souls of vanity, to humble us with a dos of humility, if that makes sense.

My account was closed when i was very busy offline for awhile, and to prevent reviews building-up … which seems ironic, seeing as how this response is 4-years old … I'm sure due to the site failing to notify me "again!"

Thank you ever-so graciously for your gorgeous review! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Lyn Anderson]

This is very pretty, delicate, melancholy, romantic. You folded a lovely story into this form. I have been busy organising for a month on and off, and am getting back to reading and writing. I still have many poems to go. I have one whole book just dedicated to form poetry. (I do have a couple of "sonnets" in there that are to be taken with a grain of salt, lol.) However, "My love for you in trochee' is in fact, complete -- using trochaic metre. I rather like it, though it's blasphemy, I am sure. I so admire your patience and ability to work within forms, and appreciate your mentorship. Others here feel the same.:)

[Richard🖌]

My Dearest Lyn 🌺

I've not the foggiest how I missed your gorgeously meaningful, personally touching, and heart-filled words, unless the site (again) did not send me notice. 🤔

Whatever … I cannot begin to adequately express how deeply you've reached into my heart and touched my soul with your acknowledgement and recognition of my humble skills at writing this sadly poignant piece … as-well, your wonderfully gratifying appreciation of my efforts in teaching you … you are one of my most amazingly astute students, learning more quickly and agreeably than I expected, but what a surprise you were … fantastic to share with on every level.

My warmest, most appreciative hug to Thee … thank you ever-so truly, Dear Gracious Lyn! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Lyn Anderson]

ha ha, lol, and two years later ...

[Jamestown]

Another well written piece, I can definitely feel the. Longing
and loneliness in these words, thanks for sharing and b-blessed

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Dear Poet!
Your expressive words of praise and emotions felt truly bless an olde bard's humble efforts, Sir … I thank you, as-well.

Such a blessing is equally and gratefully returned, My Friend! ⁓ Richard

[θεά]

You are always a pleasure to read, and going through your explanations of meter is an education. You have managed to weave beauteous lines of longing and love in your 'Kyrielle', and have swept your readers off their feet, again. How you do it can only be explained through divine benediction apart from your keeness to feel and write from your heart.

Amazing poetry, as always.

Best,
M.

[Richard🖌]

Bless you, Lady θεά 🍷

Like a fine glass of rosé wine, your words as smooth and mellow going down into my heart, its bouquet flowing up into my ever-grateful mind.

Your expressed appreciation, praise, and understanding fill me to overflowing bliss … how warmly you've embraced and gratified my humble hopes someone will who could … thank you, Dear θεά! ⁓ Richard 🍃