The River, the Clouds, and Us.... (longing)

The River, the Clouds, and Us.... (longing)

A Poem by Richard
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The River, the Clouds, and Us....
I found a place to sit in solitude,
hoping to hear
what the moment held.

I listened....
imagining stories the river could tell
of its journeys through canyons,
how it overcame every obstacle
life, time, and Nature had set before it,
either going over, around, or under it
to flow right here to be with me.

Somewhere along the way …
my focus changed
as I watched the gray clouds building,
bullying the white ones into submission,
their thunderous voices rising....
until it's clear who the victor would be.

I sat in rain for hours,
thinking about how much
you are like those clouds at times,
angry, petulant....
ready to dampen everything
at the slightest provocation;

then, there's me … I'm like the river,
soaking you in, feeding on you,
determined to face any challenge
to get back to the sea....

where summer sun will heat me,
and I’ll rise up into your arms
until you tire of me again,
letting me fall back to earth.... 
the way you always do.



Richard W. Jenkins
           ©
2016

© 2017 Richard



Author's Note

Richard
Picture: compliments of Wikimedia Commons.

Something set me into a wispy, dreamlike, drifting-off mood.

Please, feel free to offer critique, or anything you feel will help improve this piece! : )

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I love the cloudy images -- that stanza in particular is striking. The feeling of falling in love with a moody person, and the speaker is the calm anchor ...

one minor thing, I am sure it is just a typo or pesky auto-correct, but its journey does not require an apostrophe, unless there is something in that sentence I am missing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

That you've again blessed one of my pieces, KL … how very happy this makes me feel!
Then, t.. read more



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So is Love, like this river, and like this sky, unpredictable, yet determined, easy yet raging at times, but look to it all, and You will see that this what adds a flavour to Love, the changing that gives it more suspense, more anticipations, more excitements, I feel this poem like a diary, but never less in the brilliance of conveying the emotions, so real that they are weaving the page with this wistfulness warmth, another gem from You, where gentle sadness and tender gloominess overwhelming us, yet the hope and belief in Your words always there, and always strong, that what I really like about this one here, and the one I reviewed before this. Tenderly Gorgeous.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

2 Months Ago

So are your words uniquely You, GH*
How much more blessed and warmly touched than is feel in .. read more
This is beautiful! The metaphors are magic, dreamy like the clouds, and cleansing as the river. It's romantic in the very best possible way.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

5 Months Ago

Ummm …
I think there may not be a realistic way to prepare for a review from you, Linda, an.. read more
An excellent poem Richard-I was particularly struck by the verse beginning 'I listened' and the idea that rivers could tell stories, Ican well believe rivers or any place offering peace and silence could indeed do that-the verse before that beggining 'somewhere along the way' perhaps leave out 'and' in the third line-great writing and well chosen image

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

George Coombs

5 Months Ago

Thankyou Richard, I am interested to hear you are welsh, I have an interested in welsh/celtic cultur.. read more
Richard

5 Months Ago

Ah, Taliesin, the great Welsh prophet and wizard to fabled King Author, and a brilliant olden time p.. read more
George Coombs

5 Months Ago

Thankyou Richard
Wow... I wonder who disappointed you.. ..sigh
Who made you feel this way.... Sad and lonely and lost .. .. A beautiful view of nature, but then again.. sadness....................

Well Done. (of course)....

Jazz

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

J. J.  Nightingale

5 Months Ago

Thank you.................
Richard

5 Months Ago

As stars align and dance⁓*
J. J.  Nightingale

5 Months Ago

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The way you refer to the river imagining the stories it could tell evokes those feelings in me. How many young lovers have lain there I wonder. I have often wondered about beautiful old decaying houses and wondered about the stories they could tell. It takes a calm soul to love and deal with an angry, petulant one, and you bring this out beautifully! Incredible write, Richard. Very well penned.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

6 Months Ago

Thank you, Dear Susan!
Nothing gratifies a bard's earnest efforts than having an accomplished.. read more
SJ Mullins

6 Months Ago

Ahhh, even your comment back to me has poetry in them. ::sigh::
I love this wispy, dreamlike, drifting off poem. First the sunshine and 'imagining stories the river could tell.' Then the darkening skies ,'angry, petulant' (wonderful way to describe the rain filled structures) and relating it to the lady; and likening the poet to the river. Then, inevitably, coming back to reality after the reverie. A perfect poem. Really enjoyed it.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

6 Months Ago

Thank you, Dear Astri! : )
Your interpretation is spot-on (not many get it), you praise, expr.. read more
I saw the rising tide as I sat along the river. I watched pretty much as you did. Feeling the need of love and finding it awash with the current flowing quickly past. Surely the waters will ebb and love will return as I watch the rushing waters waiting to be energized again.
You have such a distinct way of portraying nature and its' relationship to love.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

6 Months Ago

Howdy, Dave! : )
How wonderful to receive your inspiring and appreciative words in review for.. read more
Dave

6 Months Ago

It is very easy to compliment the works you submit to us to read.
Richard

6 Months Ago

You make it a joy to share, Dave … thank you! : )
You are a storyteller craftsman. This piece took me slow heartfelt journey. I'm intrigued and will be back soon to partake of more your talent.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

8 Months Ago

Hi there, Michael! : )
It is an honor and pleasure to receive your welcome words of review in.. read more
'where summer sun will heat me,
and I’ll rise up into your arms
until you tire of me again,
letting me fall back to earth....
the way you always do. '

How many people have tried to say those words, tried to admit the emotions they wrap around, I wonder..

We little human beings are but ants in a world of love, hate and... something indefinable . Of course to each his or her own choice! Consequently, love's differences, passion's moods are surely reflections of our surroudings. You become the the gentle flow, your lover its curving course.

You take so much care with your work, Richard: display just so, punctuation dotted and dashed.. and then, there are the words set to your own music. Think this is a poem to return to, as much as a lesson as ...

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

emmajoy

6 Months Ago

For me reviews are a thank you for the pleasure of reading someone's WORK. And, if only a few word.. read more
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emmajoy

6 Months Ago

Think I'll wear this avatar for a while, it suits my sunshine mood. It was created by a superb illu.. read more
I think "drifting-off mood" fits very well. I don't know why you chose this format, it was interesting to read yet also a tiny bit difficult to stay with the flow I found once but here & there lost a little.. Other than that, the images of nature and your choice of words for this one as good as in the other pieces I read by you. You'd definitely alternate between the different poetry styles, it's refreshing to read and you're talented at expressing yourself differently yet nicely.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Closed

11 Months Ago

I can see that... It's interesting now lol but honestly way too challenging to read. Ever thought ab.. read more
Richard

11 Months Ago

Ha-hah!
I guess I'm just too complicated in my written thoughts, feelings, and emotions to ex.. read more
Closed

11 Months Ago

Thank you and you're welcome.

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