Don't Get It Twisted...

Don't Get It Twisted...

A Poem by Carol Cashes
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My third poem...based on some memories of past loves and how right the current one is.

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Don't Get It Twisted...

I’m not your Saviour!


I can only save my own password.

The one that unlocks my heart.

 

You’re not my Saviour!

 

If I need a hero, I’ll wear the cape.

Save myself, slay the dragon, tear the villain apart.

 

I’m not your Saviour!

 

Don’t look to me for answers.

I can only pass my own tests.

 

You’re not my Saviour!

 

I don’t need your cheat sheet.

My answers lie within my chest.

 

I’m not your Saviour!

 

I can’t fix other’s wrongs.

I can only love the damage.

 

You’re not my Saviour!

 

My heart is easy, my mind hard to understand.

Just know if you wrong me…I’ll be a savage.

 

I’m not your Saviour,

You are not mine.

We can join forces

And together combine

Two complete wholes

That make a mighty force

Side by side we'll face all

With strength, honor and no remorse.


© 2017 Carol Cashes



Author's Note

Carol Cashes
You real poets out there will find issues with flow, rhythm, etc. That's okay. This is my version of a love poem...

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A touching love poem indeed.

Posted 2 Months Ago


I like the self reliance message and taking not the easy recipe for salvation to get us through. Very powerful and worthwhile. Excellent....;)............

Posted 3 Months Ago


I must admit, I looked at your conversation with Richard. It added a bloody lot of insight. I try to keep myself from saying this.

Just write,
and let the words flow.




Posted 3 Months Ago


Carol Cashes

3 Months Ago

Wow, if you read all that, then you understand the poem, and I use that term loosely as it hardly co.. read more
Jon Roggie

3 Months Ago

I get away with it by calling it spoken word.
I don't know much about poetry but I enjoyed reading that. :-)

Posted 3 Months Ago


Carol Cashes

3 Months Ago

*snort* I'm no poet, either. Never wrote any outside of English class in high school until I joine.. read more
Barnaby

2 Months Ago

Hey you can write whatever you like as long as you enjoy it. I've seen some more complex , articulat.. read more
I love this!!! this is exactly how i wish to envision a relationship..as two wholes joining together.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Carol Cashes

3 Months Ago

Sorry so late responding. Thanks for reading this, and it is a little idealistic, but do-able. I'm.. read more
A beautiful way of saying we is what we is, flaws and all. Being is fluid, describing how or what we are could bring a million different answers if asked a million times...and we are the ones thst know ourselve
s best, how is anyone else meant to figure us out?
I like your use of saviour, why does everyone have a hero complex about saving us? I'm safe enough thanks.
Enjoyed the read, thanks.



Posted 4 Months Ago


Carol Cashes

4 Months Ago

It was actually inspired by some the the poetry here that waxes so eloquently about empty souls and .. read more
The technique you've employed in saying you and your other are not each other's saviors is well established and driven home by well-placed, thought-out repeats (I was thinking saviour is a misspelling, but it suppose it is an alternative to the more oft used savior).
Hardcore awakening to your version of love makes sense, read 'em the right act, but love rarely does make sense, bending to whatever the heart most feels and needs, and love is such an individualistic thing between two individuals that it tends to grow and fit their needs who best harmonize and flow one into the other, and dividing lines aren't always easily, or are even possibly, defined.
That which works perfectly for one couple in the real world, may be disastrous for another, blah-blah-blah!
Compassion and empathy play a huge part in most couples' relationship, and most dyed-in-the-wool independent-minded individuals struggle alone, some for years, trying to find that perfect soulmate, feeling the emptiness within, knowing something (primal?) is missing, something lacking in their being that only the "right one" can fulfill, and as idealistic and fairytale-ish as this might sound, life seems to prove its validity.
How can one argue with the logic in your treatise to orderly, independent love? It's as though you might not really "need" your mate, nor, do you want to be "needed", and only under certain criteria will they be accepted, and if this works for you and your mate, so much the better.
I know no one (not saying they don't exist) who is that infallible, or not to the point you ascribe, who is genuinely whole, unless they've convinced themselves they really don't need anyone to lean on in times of need, or won't allow anyone to lean on them.
In my mind's-eye, that kind of love is a bit too set, regimented, and conditional for me, not nearly soft enough to meld with and bond together, as I believe we are meant to, as scary as it might seem to trust anyone enough to give all of oneself over to them, but (to me) true love has no boundary, no conditions, no percentages each gives unto it … it is my contention that the more one dedicates themselves to anything, the more chance of it working, than to hold back; especially, in the realm of love, soulmate relationships, and affection.
Having said all that, I wish I really knew what love is … LOL!
Your poetical prowess is really showing in the rhymes of your last eight lines and every second line of your couplets, and I dearly "love" it!

Shows real promise, Carol … hugs! ⁓ Richard : )

Posted 4 Months Ago


Carol Cashes

4 Months Ago

You are correct that love rarely makes sense. But I found love, real love a third time, in my 40's .. read more
Richard

4 Months Ago

Well, Dear Carol,
I truly and dearly love your story, not all that happened, but the wonderfu.. read more
A strongly felt poem with repition of 'Your not my saviour" making it really work for me. The concluding eight lines bring it together so well especially the final two lines. Excellent thought provoking writing

Posted 4 Months Ago


Carol Cashes

4 Months Ago

Thanks for reading and the generous review. I have always felt that putting too much of your happin.. read more
George Coombs

4 Months Ago

Your welcome and yes, I see your point
Loved the repitition of the line You're not my saviour. Strong feelings were creatively expressed.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Carol Cashes

4 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and the good review. I feel strongly about the subject matter.
Najam Us Saher

4 Months Ago

You're welcome.
Carol Cashes,
"Don't get it twisted" was a introspective look at what a relationship can be and what is wanted. The title says it all.
We people ofttimes have such high expectations of others and want to be saved and second guessed by our significant other. I am incapable of reading anyone's mind!
The line, "Two complete wholes" (last stanza) is very self explanatory. Love is a responsibility and not to be taken lightly.
Thanks for a much needed interpretation of this subject of love.
Kathy


Posted 4 Months Ago


Carol Cashes

4 Months Ago

Thank you so much for reading this. I just one day decided that some people do expect to be "saved".. read more
Kathy Van Kurin

4 Months Ago

Carol Cashes,
You got that right. To a degree love does save us but we must as your context s.. read more

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