A Mirrored Image, Love Incarnate

A Mirrored Image, Love Incarnate

By: Ethan West

Fire awakens what hate could not

Forever lost in tattered creed

And beauty's soul in anger's rot

Is left one final, tender plea

I came upon her in brightest light

My heart was blank, my soul was cold

Struggling with bitter fight

Struggling with darkness bold

And in six words my heart felt rest

My mind as restless as a bee

My heart then put my mind to test

As I outstretched my hand to thee

But her mind is dark like mine

As if to bathe in irony

She sees herself in dark decline

But all there is is light to me

And so, alone, we share this fate

We are two beautiful things to be

Two souls divine, but full of hate

Two hypocrites bound to what they see

And the broken line that cleans our slate

But ah alas, I am the dark

Even though this, you say to me

That I am the light within your eyes

What a beautiful thing for us to see

Author's Note

Not sure if I like the title... But hey! What can ya do?

Any feedback is greatly appreciated!

Reviews

[The dark story]

seriously awesome!it's such an elegant poem .i liked the rhyming scheme and the diction too..........it is richly refined with emotions and is so touching.i liked every line and each word of this poem.Hats off to you!!

[ewest1220]

Once again thank you so much for your kind words! I'm really glad you enjoyed my work and thank you so much for reading!

[The dark story]

it's my pleasure!!!!!!!!

[Kaela]

And so, alone, we share this fate.

Amazing how single lines can affect people. Another well-done piece. I can rarely find fault in your work. Keep it up!

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed my work!

[forevermore1218]

really nice work mate! I liked your imagery on the protagonist the most and thought that your descriptive write was most excellent.

loved it :)

[ewest1220]

Wow thanks! It's always nice to hear from you forevermore1218 I'm thrilled that you enjoy my work!

[J. F. Charleston]

A great piece!

[ewest1220]

Thanks!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

The title for me is whatengages the most, it flurishes the point perfectly, never change a thing, well done, good read.

[ewest1220]

Based on the feedback I've gotten from this site I think the title is here to stay. Thank you so much for reading I'm thrilled you enjoyed my work! It's always a pleasure to hear from you.

[eighwoeifj]

I absolutely love the first stanza. Such beautiful choice of words.
Your poetry needs to be read in schools. Seriously.

[ewest1220]

I would absolutely love that! :) I do have it in line to be in the library of congress and available to public library's so who knows maybe kids will be reading my work in a couple years! But anyways I'm once again thrilled you enjoyed my work thank you so much for reading!

[eighwoeifj]

Hopefully people still appreciate poetry in the future. The love for writing is fading.

[ewest1220]

Unfortunately I agree :/

[eighwoeifj]

Well, there will always be at least some people who love it.

[That1Nerd23]

This is absolutely wonderful! Very descriptive. You also expressed your emotions very well. I felt as though I was walking along your path observing your yearning for such closeness and intimacy with this mysterious gal. You are a great poet!

[ewest1220]

Wow! THank you so much for the review and I'm actually in love with the "mysterious gal" still :) Thank you so much for reading I'm thrilled you liked my work!

[That1Nerd23]

You're very welcome! And that's very sweet!

[Rox Bain ☮]

!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Whay hadn't I ever heard of your poetry before Writers Cafe?!?! Dude, why aren't you famous???
*composes self* ahem... anyway, I loved the flow of this poem. It didn't seem forced or unnatural. Again, it was a beautiful piece with deeper meaning.
My favourite lines are:
"That I am the light within your eyes
What a beautiful thing for us to see"

[ewest1220]

I couldn't tell ya lol I have a book out but being self published is a tough one :) *composes self* I really am touched that you feel this way about my work thank you so much for reading!

[Rox Bain ☮]

You're welcome :)
I'm a fan ;)

[Cosmic kid]

I love the love emitted from this poem "And so, alone, we share this fate
We are two beautiful things to be
Two souls divine, but full of hate
Two hypocrites bound to what they see
And the broken line that cleans our slate"
A very powerful way to describe a relationship
Good job :)

[ewest1220]

Thank you I'm thrilled you liked my piece!