Wash Me With Your Words

Wash Me With Your Words

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Composed in French Kyrielle form..

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Wash Me With Your Words

I let my warm imagination spring,
"Oh my, how your caress sets me aglow!"
Let's listen to what unsung songs will bring;
then, as you wash me with your words,
 I'll know.

I let you take me in your warm embrace,
with all your love upon me please bestow!
I wonder why I gift you my sweet grace?
Then, as you wash me with your words, I'll know.

I let myself to you be swept away,
 
my eyes filled by the wonderment you show! 
Around 'n round within your arms, I sway; 
then, as you wash me with your words, I'll know.

I let you reach the depths of  my cold heart, 
whence you turn hardened glaciers to soft snow.
And, now no one can e’er pull us apart! 
Then, as you wash me with your words, "I'll know!"




© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



Author's Note

Dr. YumnaKay
My first learning experience with Richard who taught me this specific Kyrielle form. Thank you for bearing with me 😊

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It is a most enthralling composition, Yumna! : )
With beautiful picture, apt font and color, creative word selections, romantic ambiance, spot-on rhymes, and a flow smooth as warm honey, your lovely mind, heart, and soul have shared a masterpiece of true poetic excellence to make one's imagination virtually melt.
Every verse sings, and your refrain, "Then, as you wash me with your words, I'll know" tied it all together in an embracing bow of romantic promise.
What a pleasure it has been to work with you in learning and writing this excellent piece, Yumna … thank you ever-so warmly and gratefully for your trust in me, and the honor of teaching you your first Kyrielle … you are an amazing poetess! ⁓ Richard ✨

Posted 7 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Richard

7 Months Ago

You are most welcome, Yumna … just say the word, I would not miss the pleasure for anything! : )
Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Neither would I want to miss it 😊
Richard

7 Months Ago

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Lovely, soft, sad, romantic piece. Loved the line 'whence you turn hardened glaciers to soft snow.'

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you for the kind words! I'm glad you liked it 😊
The structure is spot-on. The rhyme scheme is also spot on. The words ooze with romance. You have made great use of this form and it is very romantic and inspiring.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you for your kind words of appreciation, Ashan Shanker! I'm glad you liked it 😊
a well thought out piece, disciplined in its perfect format and enthralling in its imagery and emotions.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

I'm new to this form and structure thing, Andrew. Might as well try the aussie andrew form soon, bew.. read more
andrew mitchell

7 Months Ago

haha you are doing find, my path is not successful, fun for the writer but that's all.
Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Fun is what we're all after, aren't we? lol :p
I just knew Richard was in there. Nicely done. Great additions the font and photo.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Yes, he really helped me form this one! I'm glad you liked it. Thank you for the appreciation 😊
A most lovely litany of romance...presented in perfect form!

The repetition of the last line being the same in each stanza, reads with such an eloquence...you should instinctively be proud of this one!

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Kelly! That last line is actually my favourite 😉
I'm glad you liked th.. read more
I've just got to say, I'm reading this again and it brings tears to my eyes. This is by far my favorite read of the week :) Congratulations on the penning of this beautiful piece! I.I.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Woaah thank you!! You reviewed it again lol I'm much humbled. Thank you so much for your kindness an.. read more
Isabella Ivy

7 Months Ago

It was well desearved :)
Yumnakay, I'm so impressed!!! And so very in love with this poem I cannot even express it! I hope you are super-please with this piece :):):) Great write! Tremendous work :) And a good suggestion for you by Richard. I.I.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Isabella, I am happy! Actually quite much 😊 and really pleased at your response of this piece! Th.. read more
Isabella Ivy

7 Months Ago

You're very welcome :)
Richard def seeped through your words ;) Very well written, I love it. The topic, the choice of words; soft and loving. A poem that shines light and positivity on the reader. Wash me with your words - the way it should be. A great concept.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you, Vanessa! Richard really did show me how to do this properly 😊
I'm glad you lik.. read more
Closed

7 Months Ago

You're welcome. It is lovely. 😊
Nice pic again btw.
Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you! I like it too 😉😊
I enjoyed this poem a lot more than I originally thought I would. :)

It's beautiful in the almost archaic-sounding format you've done. You chose some good words strewn throughout this poem, making it sound lovelier than more "conventional" styles.

Sorry for my absence, I was without power for several days. Winds of 70-80 miles per hour.

Good job, Yumna! ;)

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

I'm glad you enjoyed this poem, Kevin! Thank you so much for your kind words. It means a lot 😊 read more
Thr form provides a fitting structure for the sensual pleasure of this writing, giving it some muscle and helping to avoid sentimentality. I enjoyed the repetition and the feeling of being overwhelmed by the experience.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you, Jibey! As it goes, the title and refrain was inspired by the fact that I actually said th.. read more

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