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A Night of Broken Sleep

A Night of Broken Sleep

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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A Night of Broken Sleep

Longer nights, shorter days,
wishes of dreamless sleeps. 
Thoughts of you kept creeping in
until I heard the cuckoo's cry.
It was to be a night of broken sleep
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Ragged breaths; stolen moments,
your mesmerizing eyes; penetrating, 
swallows me whole, consuming
a mass, filling the void I was floating in.
It was to be a night of broken sleep.

Hurricane of love; wrecking hearts,
missed beats while grazing your face.
My hand itching to smooth the creases 
etched on your frowning face; amidst all,
it was to be a night of broken sleep.



© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



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Oh my ... First of all, this poem has one of the most enthralling visual presentations I've ever seen. I've read many pieces with a beautiful picture and beautiful typography to match, but I find this one especially pleasing ... perhaps it's the variance of the colors.
As for the poem itself, I found it just as captivating as the visual. I loved the repetition and how it hit at the end of each stanza. I also loved the subtle contrast among the stanzas and how they worked to convey a similar theme. The final stanza had to be my favorite though, because I liked the mix of love, comfort, and sorrow interwoven within.

This piece reminds me of a quote by Rumi:

“When I am with you, we stay up all night.
When you're not here, I can't go to sleep.
Praise God for those two insomnias!
And the difference between them.”

- William Liston


Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

I wasn't aware of that quote, so thank you for sharing that here. And thank you for appreciating thi.. read more



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A good description of the impact of being sleepless - with the imagination and feelings working overtime and the vision of another presence - an object of love. I liked the tender touch of smoothing the creases and hope the frown was an indication of worry, not of disapproval.

I liked the line 'missed beats while grazing your face'.

I sympathize. It's 4 am here.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

well you interpreted right. It was meant as worry and not disapproval..
I'm glad you like it... read more
Awww this is so cute 😄😄 I love it! What a wonderful piece, what a wonderful reason to be tossing and turning in the night, unable to sleep with that person on your mind! A great write as always my friend, I love reading your works 😁

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

well then let me challenge you to write something cheesier than this hahah :p
Kesha

6 Months Ago

Haha okay I will take up that challenge tomorrow when I get the chance ;)
Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

Cool! I look forward to that ;) :)
Oh my ... First of all, this poem has one of the most enthralling visual presentations I've ever seen. I've read many pieces with a beautiful picture and beautiful typography to match, but I find this one especially pleasing ... perhaps it's the variance of the colors.
As for the poem itself, I found it just as captivating as the visual. I loved the repetition and how it hit at the end of each stanza. I also loved the subtle contrast among the stanzas and how they worked to convey a similar theme. The final stanza had to be my favorite though, because I liked the mix of love, comfort, and sorrow interwoven within.

This piece reminds me of a quote by Rumi:

“When I am with you, we stay up all night.
When you're not here, I can't go to sleep.
Praise God for those two insomnias!
And the difference between them.”

- William Liston


Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

I wasn't aware of that quote, so thank you for sharing that here. And thank you for appreciating thi.. read more
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Amazing as always Yumna. So delicate and powerful!


Perfect balance! :)

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

Thank you, Bev. It's powerfully sappy haha 😛
Glad you liked it 😊
Someone is very lucky to have you care that much for them, under a broken night of sleep.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

Hmm I feel I am the lucky one here 😊
Thank you...

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