Butterflies Fills Me.

Butterflies Fills Me.

A Poem by A Risen Heroine.
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My mind is racing
This crazed obsession;
Mean everything to me
You're all I see in my dreams;
You; and your loving heart.


I don't care if you live far from here
You're all I ever want
You're all I need in life
You're the reason I'm so...
So happy.


When I'm not with you;
The memories are on repeat
They'll never stop
I'll always love you.


Butterflies fills my stomach
Heart beating faster
Looking at my cell
Heart skips a beat.
"1 New Message; Jacob"


I love you more than the air I breathe
More than the food I eat
More than the water I drink.

© 2011 A Risen Heroine.


Author's Note

A Risen Heroine.
Ignore Grammar Problems.
Honest Opinion As Always~

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Another great poem about love and the emotional baggage that comes with it. I really enjoyed reading this poem, because I related to it. I have had that feeling. The overwhelming happiness that fills up your body when you see you received a message from that special someone. Once again, great poem!

Posted 12 Years Ago


:O epic. love it. nice to know you've found someone better:3

Posted 12 Years Ago


So beautiful and romantic. I Loved it.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is romantic indeed. The way you describe how you feel about that person and them being the only thing you live for makes up for it. The effect of using a present day use of a cell phone also is a way to show how you can keep in touch not only verbally but heartfelt as well. Love is a dose of medicine that needs to be taken right because in the end, if it doesn't work it can end in tragedy. Awesome work!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow! I can totally feel the love throughout this poem! I love it! Its so dreamy and that kind of teen-romantic image comes to mind of course! I feel the butterflies as well towards someone at my college right now and... >.< I'm not sure how to deal with it. lol. But being in love isn't always bad.. it can inspire, motivate... just gives us that push of LIFE within us! =D
But I love the flow of this poem. Its so carefree.. i can also relate. Thanks for sharing! Just lovely!

Posted 12 Years Ago


It's a great feeling, isn't it? great work!

Posted 12 Years Ago


I love...love and this is good :) xx

Posted 12 Years Ago


How exciting for you!
Young innocent love.
The butterflies and
loss of appetite
are good signs.
Perhaps he has butterlies,
loss of appetite and spinning
thoughts for you too!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Great write here, my friend. :) You say to ignore grammar problems, but I think you should probably just go back and fix it. It'll improve your poem 100% if you just remove the 's' from 'fills' in the second to last stanza. Your poetry will look better if they're clean. Other than that, I think the only thing you might want to work on is using more emotionally provoking words. Simply put, use stronger phraseology to get reactions out of readers.

I hope this helps!
Thanks for sharing!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Butterflies in the stomach is a good sign. When someone get your attention and you can feel and see the possibilities. It is a good feeling. Thank you for the positive poem of love.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago



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