Time

you must value your time

One thing moving

tic tic 

tic tic

Taking your age away

Making you feel old

Giving you experience in each day

You get used to it

You have to wait for it

but it doesn't wait for you

It never stops for anyone

giving you enough

but still something less

You always need it more

more for each day

Some period ends with happiness

Some ends with gloominess

One thing is still moving...

Reviews

[.shalynn.009.]

Ooh, I got chills with that ending line. A wonderful characterization of time. I like how you started out with three line stanzas, went to two-line stanzas, adn ended with one line, in a kind of progression, the way time progressed, leaving the speaker of the poem behind. This underscored the tone, that feeling of wanting more time, but having it slip away, just like the number of lines in the stanzas dwindled away. Possibly my favorite that you have written. Well done.

[Jeff]

It reminds me of the old Floyd tune "Time". Great work here

[HopelesslyDevoted]

this is really cool. have you heard the song Time by Pink Floyd, thats what this reminded me of, look it up if you haven't heard it before. i think you will like it.

[A Risen Heroine.]

wow, this is quite good!
Thanks for sharing and keep up the good work! :)

~A Fallen Heroine~

[?]

yes, so true, and it seems it is moving faster and faster now days.
Time never stops.
Very nice poem

[Sara Mercury]

That's true - you have to wait for it, but it doesn't wait for you. lol

Time is only a point of reference anyway, something created so we would better understand in clay bodies what the bigger picture looks like, at least in part. It's only when we move beyond time itself that we are able to see things as they truly are.

[Steph's_romantic_myster..]

this is a great poem Thanks for sharing

[Ruth]

Time is something that is illusion, to me, but strange how that illusion can manipulate so much reality! lol
Awesome love
xx

[Denise]

I like how the poem began with one thing moving and ended with one thing still moving.