I can't breathe

I can't breathe

A Poem by Avia

It's unexplainable, I don't understand it
My body isn't fine, I feel a burning heat
From within, inside me, what is this?
My insides seem to be turning, something's amiss
I woke up with the thought of you and rushed
I tried to reach you, no answer. Now i'm scared, I feel flushed
Is something wrong? Why am I so worried?
I just know at this moment, it feels pretty hard to breathe.

© 2017 Avia


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Its suffocating when the person we value becomes unreachable, even if its temporary because you think of the worst that could happen to them. Negative scenarios are something none of us are fond of, but yet we ponder the possibilities of them. I think many people have felt like this at one point or another in life. Sometimes its mind over matter and you get to a point when you can sense something isn't right with those you care for. Thank you for touching on these feelings in your poem. keep writing and growing. :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Avia

1 Year Ago

I agree with you, sometimes we just sense these things and the feelings are so intense. Thanks for .. read more



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Its suffocating when the person we value becomes unreachable, even if its temporary because you think of the worst that could happen to them. Negative scenarios are something none of us are fond of, but yet we ponder the possibilities of them. I think many people have felt like this at one point or another in life. Sometimes its mind over matter and you get to a point when you can sense something isn't right with those you care for. Thank you for touching on these feelings in your poem. keep writing and growing. :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Avia

1 Year Ago

I agree with you, sometimes we just sense these things and the feelings are so intense. Thanks for .. read more
Hello, Avia, thank you for entering my contest! :)
This is quite a description. Sometimes I worry about my loved ones. It's rough when they don't answer the phone.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I know this feeling off and on, very well written and expressed. I like your style of writing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Avia

1 Year Ago

I get surprised when people find my poems so relateable. It makes me feel less weird.
silent k

1 Year Ago

I think we're all a little weird in this universe, it's how we fit in society. :)
beautifully penned down . i mostly like and write these types of poems with an element of darkness .
not many people like this genre

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The poem is really interesting. i like it. the main idea of the poem is difficult grasp though. the words are appropriately and beautifully used.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

With the thoughts of panic gripping
and the burning deep inside
comes the void of something missing
with no place for it to hide

You've shown us how the constant fear
of other shoes to drop
cancel out the joy and cheer
assuring one more flop

But in the end you take a peek
into the worry pit
and take a draft of stagnant air
could that be really it?




Posted 1 Year Ago


Wow. The level of truth this has is way crazy. Completely and totally relatable. Perfect way to put your feelings and emotions into words. Really good poem.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Anxiety attack!

Slow deep breaths.....:)

Captured the essence of an attack rather perfectly. Yearning for that special someone does stir such bodily responses.

Nice write.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Avia

1 Year Ago

Thanks Doodley ☺
A moment of tension, you made me feel the same while I was reading this. Nicely written.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Avia

1 Year Ago

I feel better now, I don't think it's something serious, I'm just a bit sick.
Najam Us Saher

1 Year Ago

I hope that you feel better soon.
Avia

1 Year Ago

Thank you ☺

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