Longing To Belong

The man with the plan

Usually I am

As of lately I'm

Going through changes

Like a pair of jordans

Not use this so bear

With me

 

Share with me your concerns

Stay with me and begin again...

With me

The man with the plan 

I use to be

But still...

 

This man asks, with no plan

Can he still be the man

To keep your heart vibrant

 

Reviews

[selkietales]

Plans are nice, but it's the person behind the plan who's the man! I don't if that makes sense, we read your poem in a weird voice so it's really funny to us even though logically we know it's not funny and has meaning. Even if you didn't want to know that, I told you! So I reread it, seriously this time, and it's pretty good. The only error I noticed is that you say "use to be" when "use" should be "used."

[Coyote Poetry]

A interesting poem. Good to be the man with the plan. Hard to always maintain. I did like the ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Gomer LePoet]

Plans are good, when it comes to business or finances, but when it comes to affairs of the heart, not so much. If you find a hard proven plan that works when it comes to love, please let me know, I've been searching for years.

[Poetic Beauty]

We are always evolving in personality and thoughts. Discovering and rediscovering who we are time and time again. Those that matter most will walk the journey with us and bring joy and strength into our lives.

[Eve]

such a powerful plea, sometimes the best plan is to show up empty handed offering only your heart.

[Mockingbird]

as long as his heart is true and never betray then the girl should give him a chance. great job.

[Liderien]

I don't know about other women, but sometimes the excitement of exploring life is all a woman needs coupled with the passionate love of her mate.

[SeventhSin]

I really liked this one :) Definently not average!!

[Lunny]

this is average but you're on a good way! :) however, I like the poem ^^

[Kelsy]

Was the 6th line not supposed to read like:
'Not use to this so bear'.
(just a thought).Anyways it's a nice poem,beautifully done!