LEBERATE

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Reviews

[JR]

I like the way you structured this, in a way. It certainly broke convention, and that's what poetry is supposed to do. The message was great, that before one can fully understand something well enough to rebel against it, one must first become a part of it. Like me and Christianity, but that's another story.

In a way, the poem is confusing in the layout. I also don't understand the use of "Leberate" instead of "liberate," and I'm not sure that you even needed that word in there. It's a good, clear message, but I'm not sure that the layout enhances it; it may just confuse the issue.

[Kelly D. Burris]

I really like this one!
Kelly

[Luna Tique Fringe]

Now this, I understand...I must say I agree. I love the format as well as the text...Leberate? alternative spelling?

[Brian Osterhouse]

True. I struggle with that thought in regard to systems. Systems destroy me, but at the same time have been the basis of my foundation.

[Katie]

fiery words. insightful, meaningful. truly stirs my soul. very nice work =)

[Dane Osborne]

This is cool. I'll admit that I didn't understand your work at first, but that doesn't mean i didn't respect it:) At first I thought of it as a revolt against languauge like the dadaists did but now I see it as a celebration of expression by means of revolt against the structures that can tie it down. Please tell me am i right in assuming that? i'll be watching your work for awhile its among most unique i've read as of lately

[Llysofar]

I can't reply, except in a poem:-

To be is the same as not to not be,
and so, just being,
is my best act of rebellion.
Language cannot rule me
for too long.

[Crap!]

United we stand. But a house that is divided is the breeding ground of anarchy. Which may or may not be a good thing depending upon the degree of civilization among the populous.

[Roy Jacobs]

Great poem about what it takes to be a rebel. Such words ring in this soul that is full of fire. It is strong in it's brevity. Great.

[Ðisposal Of �oxic &..]

interesting... the layout of text forces one to observe more of what the message is, a strong statement now becomes profound... cheers

[Paul]

synthesis of William Carlos Williams & Manet......paint with yr tonue, drip with yr eyes