THE HALLUCINATION

True Friends are a precious gift from God. "A Boy gets lost in a Hallucination, shares his experience and prays for eternal friendship of true friends..."

Author's Note

Please watch it on YouTube channel 'TSB Worldwide' too :)
https://youtu.be/99OCT8aIM_c

Reviews

[Ghost writer]

I liked when you said '...is what the soul in this shell cries' because it's true that our bodies are just shells, vessels they're not who we are, I wouldn't even say they're what we are, because the soul lasts forever, but the body never will.
When you were talking about the relative it would be 'a' not 'an'
I liked this it was sad that the friend wasn't real. I like that idea though.

[wuliheron]

A Rumi fan! He was good, but needed to work on his analog logic, to take it to the next level.

[barleygirl]

I applaud you for experimenting with arranging your words upon images . . . the way you lighten the image just under the words is especially well-done, nicely feathered. I've never seen anyone do this, usually text is hard to read in spots. Also, this lightening is not overdone, so as to distract. I love the idea of spending time with someone who has passed over . . . I often feel the presence of someone I'm missing from "the other side" (I like how you keep this vague so anyone can interpret how they believe). You make this scene between the two who are "meeting" nicely mundane & earthly, even tho it's a heavenly experience. This suggests that people really just want to spend some time with that missing person, not so much have some grand psychic experience where one gets "answer" . . . nice job & happy new year! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thank you so much for reviewing my poem and sharing your thoughts. Glad to see your review after a long time.
Wish you too a very happy new year!

[Himaya Ka]

"I felt such kind of pain of losing the friend whom I did never befriend." It's hallucination, indeed! :)

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thanks for your comment!

[Just Kim]

this is so good, much enjoyed the write

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thank you so much for your review, Kim.

[Just Kim]

not a problem, i hope you have a great day

[Aradhana]

It's just like a rain on summer day when one remembers the gone ones. The memories are all left after all! we are all fated to dia at some point of time may be few minutes later, few months later, or few years later..But all we can do is love the ones around and remember the dead ones as u know our body has memory cells and the first reply u do to the circumstances is being stored and the body reacts the same way if it happens again. So one must be optimistic in every situation .... Liked ur work, emotions did come to me as i was going through and .......it was good!

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thank you so much for your kind review! I agree with your thoughts.

[wordman]

great job on this one,creative

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thank you so much!

[wordman]

you`re welcome

[Lacey Sue]

I may not be able to do the other songs for a few days because I start work Thursday and am currently studying for my permit

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

It's okay.

[Lacey Sue]

Sometimes hallucinating is good if it's spiritual hallucination I spiritual hallucinate and see my gram and pap and hear them I speak to them and it sounds like I'm crazy, but I'm not I just feel it's good to see and hear your loved ones

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Yeah Hazel! Thanks for reviewing this for the second time (-:

[Clif]

I had a flashback reading your poem, from way back when I use to trip and have hallucinations from dropping acid.

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

[Lacey Sue]

This is phenomenal work!!! I mean as I was reading it I felt the waterworks because I gotta say after what happened a few months ago to me I started hallucinating and I can't sleep at night because I always feel like someone is standing above me which makes me more scared, to be honest so I'm glad people can write things for others to read that they can connect to

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thank you so very much Hazel! Though I have never experienced any hallucination, I just wrote this one, for a friend I did never befriend..

[Lacey Sue]

That's very good you seem like a loyal friend

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thank you so much.

[Lacey Sue]

Anytime being honest