Chemistry Betrays (Revised)

My chemistry betrays me as insanity pleads before lean-jaded depravity

seen scorn as a decrepit unraveling

of baffling mean-spirited entities gathering deceitfully

for more pandering of reality in a gallery slinging misery entirely...

My sympathy behaves erratically

seethes forlorn as heated apathy forms rapidly

soft-churning rhapsody squirms passionately...

Inevitably heart-warming tragedy occurs.

Fiendishly hard-earned philosophy

turns of metaphor laced individuality...

Blurred and slurred rhymes.

Aggressive lines wormed into the tapestry of sadism

this organisms mechanism of limelight fading posturism

burning eyes turning bright from realism

shading light from mine minds rind empty escapism

slime heavy kinda heady with the infectious algorithm...

 Swirls bleeding lecherous breathing escaping the rhythm of morbid reality

 curiosity yearns for instability

With the itty-bitty fallacy of a gallant killing spree

 gallons of rippling prayers stripped of buoyancy

 floating dead in the sea flamboyantly... 

Author's Note

Same poem (mostly)... But now edited... Yay...!

Reviews

[Robert Trakofler]

the velocity of your perspicacity of the duplicity of words specificity makes the bunny's brain nuerocity spark enthusiastically! LOL.... my god I have met my match!!!! You love words and they love you I know cause they just told me my dictionary just salivated all over my desk and started to groan in an unsightly manner causing me to have to clean up some unmentionable goo... be sure to put the dictionary farther away from the word porn next time. :)

[Chase Dylan]

Words are fun, flow structure is what this was intended for, aha... I f*****g died laughing when I saw your review, though...
Called my wife over, I was like...
Look at this moddafucker
im dying laughing...
DYING...
Number one review....
Ever...
You wanna know something else...
I do not use dictionaries or thesaurus or any help when writing...

All natural, or it aint happening...

I spell and meaning check on words i already put down, though...

EVERYONE tells me...

"dont write so your reader has to pick up a dict. every 5 secs"
But...

How am I supposed to KNOW what they all know or not...
I let the reader decide his/her intelligence

Cheers at such a pleasant comment...

"Match"...
Do not get carried away, eh, mate...?
Lololol

[Abhishek Asthana]

wow, you are artist... the way you play with words is outstanding and definitely many of us can learn by moving out of our own comfort zone... it is hilarious one, i deeply enjoyed reading this... great work S.S :)

[Chase Dylan]

I deleted one of your reviews, as it double posted... Heh, and thanks so much A.S... You have a way with reviewing that makes me feel humbled to be enjoyed by such an amazing writer...

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

What can I say? You've used adjectives very skilfully and I respect that. A dark poem, yet very beautiful and intriguing. Keep it coming!

Love,
Vasilees.

[Chase Dylan]

Well, what can I say... Thanks a ton, VS...

[Surya]

Intense and thought provoking...I liked it..:)

[Chase Dylan]

A thought provoking review, thank you S...

[Joey Nizz]

I loved your display of words you had going on in this poem, powerful and beautiful.

Great job Silente.

[Chase Dylan]

I love the display of appreciation, Nizz... Thank you...

[Joey Nizz]

You are very much welcome ^^

[wordman]

well ,edited well,interesting and thought provoking

[Chase Dylan]

Thank yeh, Word of Man...

[CMC]

Sometimes we feel sympathy that we can't control, despite how much humanity has committed to a path of sadism, deceit, and people trying to fix the world like it's broken. They pray and pray, but their fallacies are irreparable, and they are left empty in a dead sea of emotions. Reality is too hard for any one person to comprehend alone...well-penned my friend.

[Chase Dylan]

What a wonderful stew of words, amazing, even... :3 Hah, thanks for the review... Chris... Means a lot to meh, especially such a cleverly phrased one...

[CMC]

I couldn't have phrased it without such an amazing work to read. I mean it, you did a wonderful job with this, like always. :)

[keith]

i am drawn to the free verse lack of punctuation.

i find comfort in verse that has no definitive signs of start, stop, begin, end, pause, etc.

it makes, rather expects the reader to use their comprehension skills rather than directed laziness.
it is easy to fall prey to rambling lengthy verse that doesn't have connective carry from first word onward.
this offering does not do so.

i refuse to offer suggestion of change as it would then become my version of your vision.

i will note i did enjoy the read and encourage you to continue this path of free verse with cautionary offering ... never dumb down in effort to engage the masses but rather offer more precise wordage that appeals to a larger audience, after all we write in order to share.

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks, ABG... Your words mean much to me, and I agree with you... I am not fond of OVERLY complex schemes... I would NEVER dumb anything down... Not a fan of handrails on writing... I DO try my best to keep it implicit in wordage, and endeavor to keep the rambling at a minimum, hah.. Thanks again for the wonderful review, and I shall keep your insight in mind when next writing...

[SSKaitlyn]

Intriguing and breathtaking at the same time. I already saved it to my favorites in my library because it's just, it's incredible. From the wording, to the vocabulary and flow, and the dark undertones and meaning. It has every component an exceptional poem needs, and I love it. I'll probably read it again later, and I'll feel the exact same way when I do.

Magnifico, love. Truly.

[Chase Dylan]

I am humbled to receive such lavish praise from such an exceptional poet... Truly, thank you...

[SSKaitlyn]

It's well deserved.

[FlatLineBeauty]

It seems to speak to me and how im feeling today :/ im not sure i get it in just the same light but in my own way. today my emotions are everywhere... mostly in dark places. Its like you're saying things I am not able to vocalize just yet. xo FLB

[Chase Dylan]

We all face things in the light of of our own day... Even if it is a dark day... Hope things tint lighter, and you find a voice... Thank you for the time, and glad you were spoken to by the words...