A Poet's Cliche'd Lament

A Poet's Cliche'd Lament

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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having a bit of fun ;)

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Layers of onion
Chisel granite outcropping
Rigormortis sets

© 2019 Einstein Noodle


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This is a remarkable tiny droplet of an idea that paints a huge portrait in my mind . . . how the icy mountaintops cause granite outcrops to flake off like onion . . . swirling with the idea of how layers of an onion being hardened into rigor-mortis could resemble a poet with writer's block trying to chisel off a few lonely words (is that what you're doing here? *wink! wink!*) Love it! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 5 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

yep..it sure is me dahlink Margie!! always tickles me innards to have your visits ... love on ya gir.. read more



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and the poet will keep digging and digging in the "rocks" continue carving his "shapes" of poetry until his bones run old and crack... yes that's how poetry can be in life, the very essence of everything about us, or what made us, even our bones, bled into words, and that's how I read Your words Creative Poet Mr.E :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

yes yes yes ..we do keep on chipping don't we ;) love your review Light ... gives me a big grin this.. read more
lightsong

5 Years Ago

Yes we do, and You are SO very welcome E :)
Nothing more eye catching than the flashing of a neon light.
That is the image that springs to mind when I read power packed pieces like this.
You're clever coupling really works.


Posted 5 Years Ago


Cherrie Palmer

5 Years Ago

Is the picture yours or just a great discovery?
Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

just a great discovery ... i am not much for taking pictures ...my older son has a very keen eye for.. read more
Cherrie Palmer

5 Years Ago

Lol, well I thought it might belong to your family. My grandpa was born in 1902 and I have some old.. read more
So few words yet holding a lot of meaning. You are quite the artist, E. Layers of the onion...layers of thought...your words hold many layers of connotation for sure. Lydi**

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

in the eyes of the beholder eh!? oh there i go again ;} i had a bit of fun writing this but i seem t.. read more
Lydia Shutter

5 Years Ago

Indeed we are...and that is what counts!
To me, the 3 lines speak of the 3 different approaches to writing. The first is when you've been blessed by the kindly muse, and one by one the layers of the onion are stripped off with fervour, as you watch the poem emerge from underneath, like a neatly tucked-in infant. Such instances are rare for me, but those rare times are pure bliss. And the poems that i write in such a trance seldom undergo much editing.
The 2nd line could talk of the poems where you really put in the effort, neatly editing and re-editing thousands of manuscripts to chip at the hard granite, and watch your masterpiece take shape slowly.
And alas the third😂... the infamous writer's block, describing writing as a slobbering and slow process, like a tedious mechanical workout, and the writer's block is the rigor mortis you have to overcome to get your arms to function.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

spot on Moon Girl! thank you for such a thorough and sensitive review ... my way of having a bit of .. read more
Chiseling, chiseling- ouch!! Writing is like peeling onions- great on-point metaphors E.! Well, back to chiseling before the rigor takes me- ha! Love this Senryu.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

thanks for reviewing Annette ... yeah! it can hurt a bit ... the chiseling ;} love and peace always!.. read more
The hardening of humanity and a stony heart. Needing a chisel to break into it's unaffected, unfeeling heart. So they might as well be dead.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

i know...it a rather bleak ditty isn't it ... but at least we do have our layers eh!?
E.
I suppose if we chisel to the core we discover mankind.
That's definitely when rigor mortis sets in.
But we can't change it now.
Though, the Planet of the apes did a good job.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

love those apes ... and sure love the Planet as well! ;) thanks for reviewing Paul ..it's a tough go.. read more
Paul Bell

5 Years Ago

Just need a bloody big hammer.
Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

:)))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
i see it now lol. nothing flexes when it has hardened and died....
Set like rock with no heart :(

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

yes! some things die without the flowing waters of change eh!? thanks Stella .. so very much for giv.. read more
Stella Armour

5 Years Ago

well, you know my friend how i struggle at times , :)
Three lines of brilliant, lingering life, layer by layer. You do have a way of making stone breathe!


Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

thank you so much Owly .. i am honestly humbled by your review ... so gratified you pealed away ;)read more
Wow layered and sublime. Great in brevity. Kudos.

Nice to read from u again ,
Plz Pleez do comment/review my newest poem too

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

i sure will S! thanks for the invite .. and i certainly appreciate your taking time and reviewing .... read more

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