i Want

i Want

i want your eyes to speak as

hands that grace lilting southern magnolias ...a

tensile tenuto .... a

leaving of finger tips  stars tracing

i want

hot cocoa and ground red pepper

your hair alive with

emeralds  streaming seaside pearls

that sacred place

i want 

breath to my life 

and drinking

each from one dawn to another

impaling our thoughts ..........a

soul quenching,  wanting  thirst 

i want you.

E.

11/29/2019

Author's Note

Reviews

[Eilis]

I really like the way you mix ideas here. The sensual alongside symbols of comfort. The emeralds and hot cocoa (albeit spicy :D). These juxtapositions speak to me of a greater depth than just a physical want. The soul wanting another soul intertwined with it perhaps.

Sometimes it’s not possible to get close enough. There are distances even in closeness that make it difficult to feel a complete sense of satisfaction.

But your poem reaches. That tenuto is inspired. What a lovely way of thinking about it. Musicality and stopping time to hold on. At least that’s how it shakes out in my head.

This is lovely work, E. Love and desire do create beautiful landscapes in the head-heart. When we step back and let them speak without fear.

[Einstein Noodle]

your review hits every note Ellis .. i am blessed this reached you in all the ways it should .. thank you for such a sensitive thorough read .. so happy it put you there .. i had not thought of those times that no amount of closeness will achieve a fulfillment looked for ... a whole other ballgame eh!? hmmmmmmmmmmm might just tuck that away and steal it from you! ;)
E.

[Eilis]

I look forward to reading your take on the idea, perhaps. You’re very welcome, E.

[Pryde Foltz]

Superb romantic write, E:) So many fabulous turns of phrase.

"your hair alive with
emeralds streaming seaside pearls
that sacred place"

[Einstein Noodle]

thank Pryde .. glad you enjoyed this little ride of romance ;) not surprised the "sacred" touch you :)))))))) love and joy dear friend ... so glad you are here ... at the Cafe''
E.

[Lydia Shutter]

Fanning myself here.....such passion....such desire! All written so elegantly and that graphic you chose to accompany your words is simply stunning! The imagery in this one is spectacular. The romance is over the top. E, this one rocks!

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Lydia ... always for your time and thoughts .. i don't often go to that place in writing .. your words flush me cheeks a bit ... we are gloriously made aren't we ... to be the only creatures on Earth who can experience love in so many colors ... so happy you enjoyed reading and the pic ... i love that pic! ;) and love on you my friend!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

geez, E....this is so intensely romantic...
"tensile tenuto" what a fantastic phrase with alliterative beauty...
and the picture is quite genius...
to leave those finger tip indents on our hearts...even after she leaves, there is still the slight pressure being felt...
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

what a smile your reveiw has brought to me face jacob ... you see the pic ... hallelujah! it says it all to me :)))) i found it after the poem ... thank you for reviewing and letting me know your thoughts on it ... and you picked out a phrase that is also important to me in writing .. spot on brother .... sometimes we are one :)))))))))
E.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear E... southern Magnolia eyes... fingers tracing stars...
wanting to experience those breathless moments when waterfalls
bring solace to a world of uncertainty... we ponder the eternal
longing for a world of wonderful atonement. truly, beautiful
in every emotion. Pat

[Einstein Noodle]

Pat ...... thank you .... that this touched you in such a way takes me breath and words with it ... so i just say thank you ... :)
E.

[gram linski]

beautiful love poetry full of yearning, I hope you succeeded, great photo also, is this your own work, if so I would like to see more, keep on writing in the free world, E, for it may not be free for long

[Einstein Noodle]

no.... not my pic .. i'm really happy you mention it though ... i kind of see that whale longing for something big time ... and there he is .. captive in his world so small ... yeah! the "free" world seems the "big lie" more and more ... probably why spiritual truths point us in non-materialistic realms ;) always very happy for your visits and thoughts gram ...
E.

[Fran Marie]

drinking
each from one dawn to another
impaling our thoughts ..........a
soul quenching, wanting thirst
i want you.

o h .my my..but this is beautifully penned..and
" I.want" to read this again an d again..such lovely chosen words in poetic verse

nice work E

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks hon! i appreciate your reading and commenting .. thrilled that you would read more than once ;)))))
E.

[Pete]

those wants certainly do light a fire within us as do your incredibly, well-chosen words and imagery - capturing the essence of desire. for some reason made me think of, "If wishes were horses beggars would ride." also made me think of the times when i was a kid and the impatient fixation waiting for that which i wanted. the desire for our loves certainly can be the strongest want of all. maybe if you cry and stomp your feet you will be granted your heart's desire. great piece e. ... :)

[Einstein Noodle]

well ... i think i tried the stomping bit ... didn't work for me ;} glad you enjoyed reading Pete! I appreciate your words ... I want .... to thank you :))))))))))))))))))))
E.

[kentuck14]

E
Man's desires . . . oh so great they are and how they call to us . . . even in our sleep!

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha yes they do! and don't ya just want to fall back to dream some more ;) thanks for reading kentuck! much appreciate your comments. :)
E.

[WanderingSteps]

Lovely! "Breath to my life" is my favorite line.

[Einstein Noodle]

Wandering!! what a surprise! i stopped by your place when i saw you had reviewed a poem i was reading and am glad i did ... thank you! see you around eh!? love and peace!
E.

[olla]

you made my mouth water.. but my lips were still dry.. that soul quenching, wanting thirst.. Mr. Noodle.. such a gut wrenchingly beautiful morning song to begin my day after yesterday...

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks olla ... that this spoke to you in such a way quenches me heart ;) thanks so much for taking time and sharing your review
E.