The Spirit

Sometime I made up when I got bored in drivers' training

power of the unimaginable

wasted away in games of war

left them to their own devices

with no idea of what was in store

hunted by the jealous man

always on the run in vain

never ceasing, never stopping

heading down the narrow lane

running through the fields of gold

crashing through the seas of blue

leaping through the winds of clear

a heavy spirit made anew

walking through the bright green forest

dashing from the birds of prey

slinking through the misty fog

disappearing far away

flying up high into the sky

never to see man again

hiding away in the Other World

writing letters I will not send

I am the spirit

that you seek

waiting for the day

that we can meet

Author's Note

This is way different than what I usually write. I hope you like it.

Reviews

[Tate Morgan]

I do like it I have a question on a few things
always on the run in vain
This line seems to set out away from the context i think it is the thought being finished on the run then added in vain seems to be a way to make a rhyme where it doesnt come naturally.I see you use adjectives to start most new lines .I like the way it reads But it tends to take each line for itself alone from the others as if not connected in the same thought .Dont take this wrong I like the3e work i rate it highly and try not to compare it with my own.I understand everyone is different and am only trying to understand the ideas that make you who you are

[deeps]

I thought this was a amazing lovely write.

[nono]

Really interesting you did a really nice job on this I think it's just awesome!

"I am the spirit
that you seek
waiting for the day
that we can meet"

So sad having to wait for someone else to die to be with them! SO SAD! :'( Nice job!

[Moonflower]

Reading this made me feel as if I was running through a jungle~

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

I like the first line then the misuse of the first idea the way man does then the last stanza which is the Spirit of God which all men need...Good work..Sunflower

[sammyj]

I like this

[Taylor H.]

I'm making up for reviews I haven't returned. So you may get a few from me depending :). OK, even though its different from what you usually write, this was a great change. You should always though something different out every now and again! Great job!

[Aislinn Gryffin ((Ashes..]

i really loved this poem. it had awesome imagery and painted a beautiful picture. =)

[Bella-Marie]

What a beautiful, picturesque poem. Think of this to a haunting melody! I loved the last para. most of all - very pretty.
Well done Havatara.