24/7

24/7

A Poem by Karina Longo
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When someone wants to win and be better than everyone else.... 24/7. It's a diseese and I thought I'd talk about this delicate disorder of wanting to reach perfection by all means. 24/7.

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Everybody has their price, even if

it's not money what can buy it.

Screaming to the ear of agony -

Traces of masochism -  it’s an echo.

Dream killers should take

thousands of painkillers -

it’s so suitable.


My irony doesn’t last a second,

at the end of the day 

everybody loves a cliché.

 

You put your pets into beauty contests

They don’t mind if they might

win or lose.

Abuse yourself instead of trying

to live the perfectionist dream through

such pure creatures.

 

Competition 24/7 -

You

against yourself.


Oh, the pages of the books

are turning

yellowish, vomit-like.

Old stories from your childhood -

Taste of honey now it’s a bit too sweet

There’s always something wrong,

something to fix.


Condemnation 24/7 -

You

against yourself

and the whole wide world.

 

Forever delayed.

Mind as a morgue.

Active passivity.

Impossible 'P'’s combo -

still, you long for it -

you want to live it each second.

You'd even beg on your knees:


"Perfection and purity - please!

24/7, now and forever;

I don't want to be God

I just don't want to be

a weak human being -

24/7, now and forever;


Amen, amen."

© 2011 Karina Longo


Author's Note

Karina Longo
When someone wants to win and be better than everyone else....
24/7.
It's a diseese and I thought I'd talk about this delicate disorder of wanting to reach perfection by all means.
24/7.

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Took me two dead brothers to learn not to want to be number 1. We live in a world that forget the common people. Big companies will lay off thousands without a blink of a eye. Wealth and glory have took over kindness and common sense. Your poem speak the truth. If the common people of this world don't stand together. One day we will wish we did. A strong ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


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"Dream killers should take

thousands of painkiller"

loved these lines...I see this world is a place of cut-throat competitions!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Perfection is inacheivable...what is perfect in my eyes is very imperfect in another's view and i think this is a great wake up call for those of us who keep thinking they can achieve it!!
Thanx for sharing!:)

Posted 8 Years Ago


"Taste of honey now it’s a bit too sweet"

This was a good line, the pleasures of sin only last a season. The highest leafs are the ones the wind takes first, these are soon buried and obscured by the lowly contented leafs.



Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"Condemnation". Thanks for warning me, Geralyn!

Posted 8 Years Ago


I am going to correct a spelling mistake, in stanza six, it should be "condemnation" or do you mean "condensation", like a ashortened version of a book?
I really like this. It is unfortunate that the ones to need to read this to see how foolish they are, won't. One of my mottoes; "Perfect is boring!"
I march to my own drum, the hell with competing, makes some people crazy, but I have had a hell of a great life, never boring.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cemeteries are full of indispensable people........well done

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Took me two dead brothers to learn not to want to be number 1. We live in a world that forget the common people. Big companies will lay off thousands without a blink of a eye. Wealth and glory have took over kindness and common sense. Your poem speak the truth. If the common people of this world don't stand together. One day we will wish we did. A strong ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"When someone wants to win and be better than everyone else....
24/7. " I wouldnt know anything about being perfect 24/7, because in my own endeavors, I am imperfect 24/7. so I guess I am not diseased in that way..

But I can judge near perfection, and I perfectly enjoyed reading this poem. I am being perfectly honest in saying that...


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Imperfection is the root of all stories that are told.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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