The Perfect Hose

The hose is twisted akimbo

It blocks the flow of water

Parts stuck under bricks and stones

The obstructions lift and it flows

Not too cold not too hot

Is the water as it flows

A focused hose

Pressure not enough to burst pipes

Yet keeps the water moving

Evenly

The water leaves and water enters

In a perfect circle

Impeccable flow

The perfect hose

Reviews

[Blue]

Reminds me that simple things like a hose can teach us valuable lessons in life... If we only spare a second to observe.

[Praveeta]

Magnificent write. Thanks for sharing.

[kublakhan27]

The simple things are often the ones most conducive to interpretation when it comes to poetry. I get the impression that there is more to this than simply a hose. Inner balance is what comes to my mind when I read it...well done Luke.

[Pryde Foltz]

This one is a bit of departure for you, highly symbolic. I loved the idea of the hose akimbo. Ultimately, our energy must flow or we become bent out of shape like this poor little hose.

[A. Amos]

This is really well done:) great work

[Baby Ricochet]

Gotta get the kink outa yer hose boy.

[rutherford]

Beauty observed and described in a simple object. Great powers of perception and word choice. I like the Evenly given its own line.