If I'm your only hope.... you're f*****g screwed

You love me for the way I break your heart,
I rearrange it like its fucked up art.

 

I smile when you're hurt,
that's the only happiness your worth.

 

You think I'm digging my grave,

but darling Im digging yours.
Maybe when your dead I'll love you more.

 

You held my breath for me,
I'm ripping my heart off my sleeve.
Back the hell down

and let me breathe.

 

Covered in dirt,
blood dripping from your face,
oh honey your so beautiful these days.

 

This is it.
You've got nothing left to lose.

 

S**t.

 

If I'm your only hope,
your f*****g screwed.

Author's Note

Thank you all so much for your wonderful feedback. :)

Reviews

[Shannon]

I may come off as slightly sadistic in saying this, but i absolutely ADORE this piece. The force of each line, the power behind it is never rackingly beautiful, and the jarring flow just makes it all the more mind boggling.

What i find very interesting is the vulgarity. The piece is formed around it almost, but does not concentrate on it. Almost like each word spits its own little insult in competition with the actual curses lol.

Kudos to you my friend for this stunning piece!

[Alice_In_WhateverLand]

Loved it :) Thats all i can say, i really, really love it :)

[Elwina]

very nice spit of anger, it feels so good sometimes !
I loved those lines
"covered in dirt,
blood dripping from your face,
oh honey your so beautiful these days."
haha
nice job

[Ima]

okay people would actually think that i am kinda Sick in liking this... but it is Awesome.... i mean amazing.... i love it ...
and its going as my favorite and you should know not many have been gone as my favorites here =P

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

wickedly gorgeous dark bent of mind~ I love the venom~ the crisp and solid artistic b***h slap of a poetic you've created here~ straight into my favorites it goes~!!!!~

[Ryan Falzon - Tymon]

I found this to be quite strong and angry, yet at the same time intensely funny! Good luck!

[TAO]

... Wait, wait...that's the only thing I can come up with right...hold on while I catch my breath... I'm sorry, I don't know if that was your intent, but this had me rolling. I mean no insult; I very much enjoyed reading this piece. I like how it all comes together at the end. Interesting work, indeed.

[Jenna Marie]

I loved this. I loved the "You think I'm digging my grave but darling I'm digging yours,
Maybe when your dead I'll love you more." part. Very intense and just overall very good. (:

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"You think I'm digging my grave
but darling Im digging yours,
Maybe when your dead I'll love you more."

{Hell yeah--love it-awesome intense!!!}

james:-)

[Jessica Mai]

Definitely, definitely, definitely enjoyed it. This is truly awesome!!!! Absolutely love this! This is so clever and just amazing! Really really well done.

[Kat Plunkett]

Haha. I LOVE IT(: