Breaking Free

Let go of the past...

A shell surrounds me

And I so want to be free.

 

I am its creator

Which hurts me like the refuse from a reactor.

 

The shell is strong

Making my efforts wrong.

 

Now I have an opportunity

To be the one I want to be in reality.

 

And I will be the one

Spreading warmth like the sun.

Author's Note

Past is Past.
I thank Joey Nizz- my fellow writer, friend, guide- for inspiring me to write this.

Reviews

[duff]

Breaking free and liberating the soul. A determined path and one of our choosing. Completely unique. A spirited write and an enjoyable read Neetha.

[Zephyr]

Thank you for the warm review Duff:)
I am glad you enjoyed!

[duff]

Very welcome friend:)

[Abhishek Asthana]

lots of hopes came from this shorter piece...almost ready to spread warmth like the sun.... very well done neetha

[Zephyr]

Thank you so much Abhishek:)

[wordman]

lovely sentiment,now spread that warmth

[Zephyr]

I wan to:)
Thanks again!

[Joey Nizz]

I am really glad you wrote this and more happy to know that you broke out of it (the shell).
I loved your words in your poem, can really make others to try to break out of theirs after they read it as well.

Well done Neetha, well done :)

[Zephyr]

Thank you so much Joey:)

[Joey Nizz]

Your welcome :)

[Kittenincake]

"And I will be the one
Spreading warmth like the sun."

I like this. It says: radiate positivity. It provokes a nostalgic memory - one where I was very positive and my friend described me as "sunshine." Now whenever I find myself in a terrible mood or judging others, I silently remind myself to be like sunshine.

[Zephyr]

Warm words and a warm smile can brighten us up:)
Thank you so much sunshine:)

[Mr.Writer]

Such an inspiring, productive and efficient poem Neetha...
We should try to let go of the past, as it will not let us live today...
Keep it up

[Zephyr]

I agree with you:)
Thank you Shaan!

[Mr.Writer]

No problem :)

[Ted Kniffen]

This isn't bad, Neetha. I understand the sentiment, that we can develop shells that prevent us from getting involved, when we really want to be part of things. One thing, the fourth line doesn't work that well...
Which hurts me like the refuse from a reactor.
 something a little shorter may work better...
i.e.
Which burns me like waste from a reactor...

It is pretty good,. Keep going. Don't be afraid of re-writes.
 

[Zephyr]

Thank you so much Ted:)
I too was not sure about the framing of the fourth line.

[Surya]

Past is past let it go away...
Suffered, realised and moved on, well....I loved it....:)

[Zephyr]

Thank you so much Surya:)

[Wajiha Nayeem]

wonderful write..keep writing.

[Zephyr]

I will dear:)
Thank you so much!

[Najam Us Saher]

Strong words are wisely written in a meaningful poem...well done..

[Zephyr]

Thank you so much Najam:)

[Najam Us Saher]

you're welcome.