Students

Students

We are both students of

Different forms of beauty

My lady labours in front of

Tall mirrors daily

To perfect her art

And whilst she is the most

Severe critic of each

Fresh line or blemish

She might find there

I practice daily

In a temple without mirrors

To remind me of all the

Women I have ever failed

To seduce with poetry

Reviews

[DarkArtz 0703]

"Severe critic of each
Fresh line or blemish
She might find there"
Everyone seems to be their own harsh critic. I relate to those three lines the most. Thank you for sharing although I was only 11 when this poem was posted I very much loved this piece. Thank you Neville for sharing this.
~ K

[Neville]

I am delighted that you considered breathing fresh air upon these otherwise dusty old words of mine my very newest of fine young literary friends .. many thanks indeed ..

Neville :)

[emmajoy]

Guess we all see beauty in different ways. In fact, guess we all see in different ways. Tisn't the outer coat anyway, tis the heartbeat felt.. more often or not by a woman.. in this poem's thought, the man.. a beautiful moment indeed! Final four lines could be a timeless quote.

[Neville]

Tis true emmajoy my friend, & in so many ways, tis true. Many thanks for popping in.....All Good Things to ya........Neville

[emmajoygreen]

You're very welcome, sir.

[Coyote Poetry]

My friend, men believe can't seduce woman. Woman decide if they want to be seduced. I liked the description used in the poetry. You made the reader see and believe. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Neville]

I am indeed honoured. Cheers Coyote...Neville

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed this one and you are welcome Neville.

[Sami Khalil]

We are our worst critics and in this case, both are going about perfecting beauty and seduction in different ways like a spiritual conquest or contest. Objectivity can be hard to say the least. An excellent poem Neville.
ATG

[Neville]

Hey, such insights & sentiments coming from you Sami have just made my evening.......Neville

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! You are much welcome. AGT

[Neville]

Hey, AGT's back at ya brother....

[Sami Khalil]

:)....................

[Karen Redburn]

Oh my the final lines caught me off guard. Yes we are all getting older and do notice a line here and there that wasn't there before. She in front of the mirror, you in front of the page, art is art I guess. The view always subjective. Enjoyed the read!

[Neville]

Many thank you's are on their way......All Good Things, Neville

[mou]

here as I find a fine line between observing the beauty over silk scarves and melting away of heart with something unexplained..probably this uncertainty calls poetry to solve it's mystery..but surely a student or follower that worships for something worthy..just Wonderful
mou.

[Neville]

You have made my day, thank you mou......Neville

[mou]

my pleasure :)

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Neville Pettitt,
"Students"
I felt process in this one: Two individuals who both are motivated in different ways. Our faces reveal all when we examine times march in every,"fresh line or blemish." I get the concern your lady may feel because time-life does leave it's mark on our faces.
Now your process is one of seeing the process of life in an analytical way: "I practice daily in a temple without mirrors to remind me of all the women I have failed to seduce with poetry.
Your were funny in your last line by the way although having someone go to the effort to write a poem for them is pretty darn nice! Just sayin.
Bless you. This was really fun.
Kathy

[Neville]

Thank you so very, very much Kathy, your time and opinions regarding these words of mine are most welcome.....All Good Things, N

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Your writing is just so good to find a focus in this life which is always changing speed. I like to just stop sometimes and focus and maybe learn while seeing another's viewpoint. thanks so much and hope I wasn't to far off in understanding.
Kathy

[Lyn Anderson]

This is an interesting piece for many reasons. I have this vision of a woman picking herself apart for her physical flaws while the man who loves her is trying to capture her with poetry. It has a solidity to it different from some of your other work. A good write.

[Neville]

An interesting perspective & some of it not far off the mark... I kind of like this too (blush)... N

[Lyn Anderson]

5 years ago. Seems not so far away but forever

[Neville]

I agree & thank you Lyn... x

[Creepy Swine Guy]

I've begun to look about where you worship. Your temple may remind you of what you say, but from your words, I see that it is the words ... the art of the words that you truly worship.

[Audrey Howitt]

I loved this-- beautifully done and with lots of great layers--

[Neville]

Many thanks. N

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Ah, the seduction of beauty and poetry...each with great power.

[Neville]

Ah, yes indeed. I realy appreciate your checking this one out. I often find reviewers only look at the latest uploads which is such a shame. Thank you again. AGT's your friend N

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

I like to start at the beginning sometimes....as they say, "a very good place to start"... so many treasures there.

[Neville]

You have just taught me a very important lesson Claire. thank you, AGT's N

[Neville]

I can't argue with that. have a good day Claire, All Good Things, N

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

You too, my friend! :)