Together Parted

haiku format .. other than that, you decide..

Together Parted

 

Perfect pink petals parted

Strobe like light pulsing

Then together those waves hit

 

Reviews

[R.E. Ray]

Well, depending on the poet's intent or the reader's interpretation, it could be haiku or senryu (I think). I'm thinking something erotic. A "flower" blooming in the parking lot of night club, two lovers flooding each other with... "love." Damn, that reads bad. Or, maybe a funky greenhouse with strobe lights and sprinklers. You may call me an idiot without offending me, Neville. The imagery is certainly brilliant, and the structure.

[Neville]

Cheers my friend.. nah' reads good from here... Have a great Sunday and true.... N

[Mrudula Rani]

I think it's a space ship landing!!! Most of the time my understanding shows how clueless iam . Why now change that!

[Neville]

it can be anything you want it to be.. never change.. no not a single thing :)

[Mrudula Rani]

Uma grande Abraço .

[Neville]

........... :) my pleasure & true..

[Chris Shaw]

This little poem, which is very pretty can be read in two ways. One is very erotic the other isn't ) Both are very nice though.

Chris

[Neville]

I'm only gonna thank you once our Chris, so am gonna thank you for both of them (lol) :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very different people coming together, blossoming in love...dancing as one.

[Neville]

thank you jacob, I could not have put it better myself
N.

[Ana Papaya]

:) I am just going to smile again and tell you that it makes me think of something nice.

[Neville]

How very nice.. bless ya my friend.. that was a a thank you by the way, not wishing to pry... N x

[Ana Papaya]

:) you are welcome. (:

it make me think of cotton candy with sparklers, of courseread more:) you are welcome. (:

it make me think of cotton candy with sparklers, of course

[Neville]

how wonderful, delicious and enlightening is that :)