Cross & Trident

Cross & Trident

A Poem by Tomislav Petricevic
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A man payed for choosing neither God nor Satan, and the war between those two slowly destroyed the world...

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A footprint in the mud,

Washed away by the rain,

A small trace of existence,

Left behind in pain.


Small leaves are soaring high,

Like falcons cutting air,

A burnt church crumbling,

Echoes of a forgotten prayer.


A war raged among these lands,

Religions clashed their thoughts,

Crooked visions clouded minds,

Vile hands tied the knots.


I stood there in the crossfire,

Refusing to take a side,

When a sharp cross pierced my heart,

And a trident crushed my pride.


My last sight left me dying there,

And wondering all the same,

Because the one who died for all of you,

Was crying bloody tears of shame.


I left the world forever that day,

All for your sinister plans,

You can hide it but He will know,

My blood is on your hands.

© 2012 Tomislav Petricevic


Author's Note

Tomislav Petricevic
A controversial poem that will surely make people hate me, especially hardcore christians. I don't like church as an institution because it has strayed from its path a long time ago, teaching people to hate each other just because they are different and perhaps have some different beliefs. I don't want to be a part of that, so I have my own beliefs of being good and respectful in general, and if you don't like that, then you should probably know I don't care. But feel free to leave a hate comment if you are offended by my poem - that kind of stuff really amuses me, so I'd be thankful.

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I actually like this poem a lot. I agree with you about those who teach people to hate others just because of their beliefs. Although I am thoroughly christian, i believe this work makes sense. We can all believe whatever we want to believe and still live together in peace. Nice work here, keep it up :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


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I like this but it somehow confuses me :/

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Tomislav Petricevic

7 Years Ago

What exactly confuses you? xD
Btw, thank you VERY MUCH for all your reviews. :D
I agree with you. The flow of this poem is amazing and simple along with the darkness. Great job

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Is it strange that my chest felt tight and twisted reading this?
I think you illustrated it beautifully. The second stanza is my favourite and without a doubt, the entire poem has good flow and intensity.

Good job.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I have been frowned upon my whole life because of my religious beliefs. Because I do not see the world as others do, or because I see too much. My people are not normal, not your kind of normal anyway. We posses the gifts that all humans can and do posses only if they would open their hearts and minds to accept it. We are characters from story books and television shows, we are mythical and mystical, they call us devils. We call ourselves witches.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The darkness warms my heart :=)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow this was really good... i agree with it and it shows the lesson perfectly.... the hardcore-christian a******s and the satan-worshipping f*****s that you refer to should read this T__T maybe theyll get something out of it and learn not to shove that crap down people throats or to judge....

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I respect your beliefs.... and this one is very good and I love it...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The darkness in this masterpiece is extraordinary! This piece deserves a maximum rating. Well done!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cross and Trident are both very powerful symbols, but in this case your words are more powerful than them! Bravo!


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow.
One hell of a poem.
Bold, direct, honest.
I think it's fundamental. Neutrality is a path, not so easily accepted, by lots of people.
Not only in respect to religion, but in other walks of life also. It is sad, really.
Creating hatred, rules, definite notions in the name of God, is sad.

A superb poem. :)


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Tags: cross, trident, religion, neutral, dying, desctruction, blood, soul, Jesus, God, Satan, Lucifer

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Tomislav Petricevic
Tomislav Petricevic

Slavonski Brod, Slavonija, Croatia



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