About me...

part of me actually

I sing in the shower only,
The four walls admire its beauty,
This is my stage,
Created by an delusional mage.

I danced in my room,
Stepped on my foot and boom,
Laughing while lying upside down,
Breaking my own crown.

I speak in front of the mirror,
Imagining a shining armor,
With a sword in my hand,
Conquering an enchanted land.

I beat the drums in the air,
Loving the bounce of my hair,
A music in my brain,
Playing again and again.

I put my thoughts on paper,
I am my world's creator,
With this, they will always remember
That someone like me exists.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

A beautiful piece. I always like poems about oneself because before anyone else, we should know ourselves.

I only have few suggestions here. You have the rhyming aabb from the first up to the fourth stanza. But I found out that you broke it in the last one with abac format.

I think it would be better if:

"I put my thoughts on paper,
I am my world's designer,
With this, they will always reminisce
That someone like me exists."

I hope this would enhance this piece. :)

[Rhianne Ney]

Sure, thanks for that (:

[Tai Ryens]

Cute memoir for yourself, I'd say you've done a fantastic job describing yourself.

[Rhianne Ney]

thanks for reading and reviewing ;D

[Soul Fire]

I love this :D so relatable

[Rhianne Ney]

glad you can relate ;D

[Allycat]

I love this! I'll be adding this to my library for sure :D I sing in the shower as well, and i'm sure everyone has at one point of another. I often imagine myself in a music video as I am listening to a song on my iPod..lame I know XD anyway, great work once again :D

[Rhianne Ney]

that's right, it feels lame sometimes but I do it ;D