About me...

About me...

A Poem by Rhianne Ney
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part of me actually

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I sing in the shower only,
The four walls admire its beauty,
This is my stage,
Created by an delusional mage.

I danced in my room,
Stepped on my foot and boom,
Laughing while lying upside down,
Breaking my own crown.

I speak in front of the mirror,
Imagining a shining armor,
With a sword in my hand,
Conquering an enchanted land.

I beat the drums in the air,
Loving the bounce of my hair,
A music in my brain,
Playing again and again.

I put my thoughts on paper,
I am my world's creator,
With this, they will always remember
That someone like me exists.

© 2013 Rhianne Ney


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A beautiful piece. I always like poems about oneself because before anyone else, we should know ourselves.

I only have few suggestions here. You have the rhyming aabb from the first up to the fourth stanza. But I found out that you broke it in the last one with abac format.

I think it would be better if:

"I put my thoughts on paper,
I am my world's designer,
With this, they will always reminisce
That someone like me exists."

I hope this would enhance this piece. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rhianne Ney

8 Years Ago

Sure, thanks for that (:



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Cute memoir for yourself, I'd say you've done a fantastic job describing yourself.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rhianne Ney

9 Years Ago

thanks for reading and reviewing ;D
I love this :D so relatable

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rhianne Ney

9 Years Ago

glad you can relate ;D
I love this! I'll be adding this to my library for sure :D I sing in the shower as well, and i'm sure everyone has at one point of another. I often imagine myself in a music video as I am listening to a song on my iPod..lame I know XD anyway, great work once again :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rhianne Ney

9 Years Ago

that's right, it feels lame sometimes but I do it ;D

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Rhianne Ney

Baguio City, the city of cold temperature, Philippines



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