Love? I beg to differ

Please don't make me feel this

Seems like the wind will change today

A new destination on the month of May

Beginning with the small petals of a beautiful flower

Alas! I hope my resistance wouldn’t falter

 

A new destination on the month of May

Please, oh please, don’t ever come this way

My heart will throb and go crazy

I won’t handle my head if it goes hazy.

 

I told myself, I will never fall

Survive your challenge; I’ve been through it all

Yet, what’s with this rebel inside?

It wants me to think again and decide

 

No! I plead, love isn’t something for me

I might not be able to break free

So, stop showing yourself and let me be

Because I won’t be able to make you happy.

Author's Note

Another random write! This is something I thought of while I was having lunch on Mcdo.
My first draft was written on a receipt (: Which I wasn't able to finish. Any suggestions are fine. This is still in free verse despite the rhyme so I'm so sorry about that. Anyways, read at your own leisure

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Reviews

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

Aho, so that's what took you so long o.e

But that aside you seem to have grown a lot. Well at least its apparent in this poem. Needless to say it was an enjoyable read though I have to comment that the font size is a tad bit large... or not

Ehem... ano iyan ha? Kaw talaga :3

[Rhianne Ney]

Hahah, wala lang eto iyong sinulat ko sa blue notebook yung tinanong mo last time (:

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

oho~ I see... I was waiting forever alone in the LA room T^T

[Rhianne Ney]

Haha, sorry ha (:P

[kublakhan27]

An interesting angle for sure...love is a beautiful thing, and just about as fearsome...you've captured that two-edged mentality wonderfully :)

[Rhianne Ney]

Thanks for reading and for your review (:

[kublakhan27]

No problem :)

[Rhianne Ney]

;D

[Frieda P]

I love that the first draft was written on a Mickey D receipt, how could you go wrong there to begin with? Taking the plunge, is always scary, but never throwing yourself in full force is a life fettered but unfulfilled also. Very nicely pen'd this one!

[Rhianne Ney]

Thanks for the review and for reading (:

[Frieda P]

My pleasure :-)

[Rhianne Ney]

Thanks again

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

Ha! You know what I loved as much as this poem? The fact that you invoked that most ancient ritual of creativity... writing on the random scrap of paper. :D

Live long and scribble much, Rhianne!

-Ufi

[Rhianne Ney]

Thanks for reading, dude

[gombeggar]

the rhyme is good so is the wording

[Rhianne Ney]

Thanks I never pay attention to the meter and rhythm though

[gombeggar]

well, rhythm and meter comes sometimes and that's good...but raw poetry doesn't always need that...i was talking about yer ryme and your words

[Rhianne Ney]

Thanks a lot for saying that (:

[Rika]

Nothing is ever simple but and love can be confusing but as you grow older it will make more since but then their will be new things that don't XD. amazing deep wright, thanks for the read. Never stop writing.

[Rhianne Ney]

You're welcome and thanks for reading (:

[Leslie Philibert]

I beg to differ from John ; it is exactly this confusion, this ambivalent message, these mixed up, confused love damaged lines that impress ; on this day at MC D´s you felt this way. Leave it as it is as a moment that will not return...

[Rhianne Ney]

Uh, yeah I guess... thank you for the inspiring review as always sir

[PurpleQuartz]

To think such a beautiful poem started out on a receipt!
A wonderful write again Rhianne : )

[Rhianne Ney]

Thanks for the wonderful read also (: Purple Quartz

[PurpleQuartz]

:D

[Rhianne Ney]

(:

[Junert]

It's nice.

[Rhianne Ney]

Thanks for reading (:

[Tai Ryens]

Sounds like something straight out of Leighton Antelman's lips, and that's a compliment. There is scarcely a concept more appealing to me than a throbbing heart, and I adulate this poem very much. Nicely penned.

[Rhianne Ney]

Thanks for reading, dude, I appreciated that