Brotherly Love

No, it's not about Philly this time.

A master-class tormentor,

a tease extraordinaire,

the monster in our basement ~

oh, the ways I saw mon frère!

 

I knew he was much wiser,

by a half-a-dozen years;

he alone could chase the demons

that would bring me home in tears

 

Now the country sprawls between us

but the miles seem to fade

when our recollections harmonize,

in kindred serenade

Author's Note

Thinking about my big brother on his birthday. :)

Reviews

[Stella Armour]

i am an only child as well and how i always wanted a big brother..lol..this is a lovely tribute to your brother Rita..

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Stella! As a child, he drove me crazy, but my life is enriched because of him (and my sister, too...)

[SteveB]

Being an only child I lacked the up close tormenter but I have a cousin who is 6 years older and he served and serves the role. The last stanza described our relationship perfectly. Very nicely done Rita.

[Rita L. Sev]

I used to wonder what it would be like to be an only child. I'm glad I never knew... Thanks, Steve!

[QuietlyCrash]

How sweet is this? Big brothers are always the best, and it's evident to see how much yours means to you. Very sweet poem, Rita :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Riley! Yes, I am lucky to have him!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is heartwarming..my sister is across the country, like-wise,...unfortunately a poem like this could not be written about her.

jacob

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Jacob. I have come to appreciate my relationship with my siblings very much...

[Pete Langley]

Gorgeous, darling. The biggest kidders are the best. I bet he`s a rock for you. P.

[Rita L. Sev]

Indeed, he is. Thank you, Pete!

[SyberRose]

Thats nice Rita...I was the oldest in my family...my younger brother is still the tormentor
even though he is a Deacon haa....nicely done...Rose

[Rita L. Sev]

Some things never change... :) Thank you, Rose!

[ShelleyA]

Hi Rita. This is a lovely poem and tribute to your brother. Heartfelt. Your love for him shines through in this piece. Very good imagery and descriptives. You paint a delightful picture of your relationship, your closeness that any reader can appreciate. Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Good rhyme and rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Lovely depth of feeling. Good word choice. Good closing verse. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Shelley!

[ShelleyA]

You're welcome.

[The Verse: A Poetry Jou..]

It's lovely, I love what you when describing, you pare words with negative connotations but add a tone of love never hate. It's amazing, "a master-class tormentor" but not a hint of hate or anger or resent, that's very powerful!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much - yes, the teases and torments of a big brother are recalled with affection. And how appropriate that you are the first here to review, as my brother's name is also Dan... :)

[The Verse: A Poetry Journal]

haha, cool. but seriously, you can convey so much through tone, you don't rely on heavy words or semi-lucid metaphors it's incredible.