The Swan Within

Was the swan within

afraid to show her true self

because she feared that

she would still be in their eyes

the ugliest of ducklings?

Reviews

[redflutterby]

This touches on the insecurity many of us carry...wonderful poem Rita! ;-)

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Red...

[Pryde Foltz]

Lovely write. A piece in defence of my pillow. LOL.

[Rita L. Sev]

Yes, your poem brought this to mind. The swan has beauty after all... LOL!

[Pryde Foltz]

evil beauty;)

[Inspiring Writer]

Once again you dropped a real piece, i made some views in my mind of this write and enjoyed this shorty piece. It's an awesome write.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, IW. Glad you could "see" this one.

[Stella Armour]

i hope not...i hope she would see her reflection in the water and her beauty....

[Rita L. Sev]

It's hard to see yourself as beautiful when all others around you do not... Thank you, Stella.

[Stella Armour]

yes, you are right Rita.....

[Frieda P]

My first response was WOW...you hit it out of the park with this one Rita. You say so much in so few words!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much, Frieda! Weird, I didn't realize how personal this piece was for me...

[Frieda P]

Weird when that happens, isn't it...you're welcome Rita, love your work.

[Angi]

I can answer yes to that question. Resoundingly so. You have a way of making one see their guts when you choose to, missy. Hrmph. Angi~

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much, Angi. I really think this was the real moral of that story all along...

[Jack...]

Very nicely done and very deep in the thoughts it creates. Some are exactly like this I am afraid. Your poem is beautiful Rita. Kind of sad, but beautiful

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Jack.

[Angel]

This will be the second time this evening that I am passing on this delightful little proverb that someone once gave to me:
You wouldn't worry so much about what other people think of you, if you knew how seldom they did...

You know, realizing that most folks are really too busy worrying about what you think of them to give much thought to forming an opinion about you...well, it helps to put things in perspective, you know? And in the end, there is only One opinion that actually counts, anyhow...

I always loved "The Ugly Duckling". I am convinced that there is a swan hiding in each one of us...
Does anyone else hear Danny Kaye, singing "and he went with a quack and a waddle and a quack..."??????

[Rita L. Sev]

Ha! I do remember that song! I always liked that story, too, because it always made me think. I was a strange kid... ;) Thanks, Angel!

[Lydia Shutter]

Now that is a thought provoking question, Rita! I think we often care too much what others think....self esteem is all important. Good metaphor in this. Lydi**

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you very much, Lydi.

[SteveB]

To paraphrase Robert Burns - Had we the grace to see ourselves as others see us.

Although I do not know if that would be a grace or a curse.
A thoughtful piece Rita.

[Rita L. Sev]

A good point, Steve - I suppose it would depend on whose eyes we were using... Thank you so much.