Whine Stopper

There’s air in my lungs

My neurons are firing

My heart keeps a-beating,

My eyes still admiring

There’s food in the pantry,

A roof overhead

Got clothes on my back

And I’m happily wed

If there’s ever a day

When I grumble and whine

Remind me of these ~

I’m doing just fine

Reviews

[Troy Henson]

This was wonderful and filled with truth Rita. How we often forget just how lucky we are to have what we have and sometimes just need that gentle prod when we lose sight of it all.

Loved it

Regards
Troy

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Troy!

[kublakhan27]

Not much I can say about this one, it's all in the poem...it should be simple logic yet it seems like the hardest thing to embrace at times, especially for those with mood issues...my mother is constantly reminding that I'm alive and should be thankful for that alone...it took a couple of decades but it's starting to sink in, probably a byproduct of simply getting older...great words and message my friend.

[Rita L. Sev]

Believe me, it took age and experience for me to get this message, too, Steve. Keep counting those blessings! Thanks!

[Frieda P]

Love the title! You're on a roll now.... one thing; you forgot shoes hon. ;) Another good message Ms Positivity...where are the rainbows and unicorns. :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Shoes! Well, I am not that into shoes (I know - what's up with that?) but I do have a weirdly extensive t-shirt collection!

[Frieda P]

Ha same difference, some poisons are just more expensive. haha ;)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i know how that is...some days we just simply forget that in the big scheme of things, we do have it pretty damn good.

nicely expressed, my friend.

[Rita L. Sev]

It's good to take inventory every once in awhile... Thank you, Jacob.

[C. Rose]

Steady beat. Consistently positive.
Consider putting space between your quartets so the rhyme scheme is more stable.
I'm not convinced change is the best idea, so just consider it.

Like getting a hug :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, C. Rose. Glad to spread some positive vibes! It's always something I do consider, how the stanzas should be laid out. I usually do go for four-line stanzas; thought this one would keep the flow better this way. I'll toss it around a bit... thanks for the suggestion. :)

[willweb]

Love the title and the poem. This was great Rita. A very fun read today.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Will - glad you enjoyed!

[Einstein Noodle]

yeh ... but ... i want the lotto .. a house on the hill .. some cars in abundance .. success in a pill.
i want a Mercedes .. a brick red Roll Royce .. i want to commune with ...
the venerable
J. Joyce ..

alas

your poem is true :(
i only can have what i can do.

E.

always blessed by you wit and pen ..:)

[Rita L. Sev]

:) Love your poetic review, E - it's nice to dream, but seeing the good in front of our eyes is a very healthy exercise! ;) Thank you!

[Baby Ricochet]

Simple abundance is a good thing

[Rita L. Sev]

Very good... Thanks, Mark.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

That is such a great attitude to take… to many people waste time worry bout what they don't have instead of appreciating what they do have… I thank God for every day that I wake up.

[Rita L. Sev]

Me, too, Dale - Misery may love company, but I like the smaller, happier crowd! Thanks!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Well if misery loves company then I would rather be a loner :) You are welcome.