Moving Day

Moving Day

A Chapter by Kat

 Beep Beep Beep 
"Huh what OH NO ALICE" Amanay screamed. She quckly threw on jeans and a T-Shirt then ran outside.
"AMANAY!!!" I screamed
"ALICE!!!" Amanay started running towards the car.
"Shut up!" Mom demanded
"No!" Mom grabbed my wrist as it started raining. 
"ALICE!!" She screamed again
"REMEMBER 10 YEARS FROM YESTERDAY I'LL ALWAYS" my vision went black and the last thing i heard was Amanay screaming my name.


© 2011 Kat


Author's Note

Kat
okayyysss its a really short chapter but i thought it wouldn't make sense to put it with the 1st one soooo

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Wow. I didn't like how short it was, not gonna lie. And it seemed so random. I know that details really would have helped this chapter. And I actually think if you had added the right transition, it would have easily fit in with the first chapter. But I am excited to see what happens next

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very nice. It was short but said alot.

Posted 12 Years Ago


the shortness of this chap made me want to read on more than ever! cant wait for you to write more!!!!!!!!!!!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Oh, at first I thought this was meant to be a poem and I got confused, but now it makes sense. Sorry, it's been a long day at work and it's' past midnight here where I am as I'm typing this. I think with the shortness that you mention and show, it can only add spice and flavor to what's next in arrival, think on it, that chapter will have much more in detail and web spin. This is like the locket, the added on story piece is going to be the full view mirroring picture.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Kat
Kat

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I can't say much I only live for my friends I love Bring Me The Horizon Anything else? Just ask me... I'm not that interesting I honestly want to die more..

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