Feels Like Forever...

Feels Like Forever...

A Poem by Silente-Write
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December...

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Woke up this morning, feels like forever since the mourning of your name...
In shame I hid tethered to fame, a blind grain of sand against a slimy flame
I'm gaining momentum like rain, a zany feelin' bein' clean
weaning myself off the draining lifestyle, my grind paid in dreams
My time stood-still, feels like December when your clever weather was stormy
I grew gills and stormed on... 
A starship trooper in September, I ran around in embers
no space vacuum in dust, I grin and shoulder on
In my holster a wand, it sings songs about wrongs
atrocities gonged through the city, a bong hit of infinity
I stare behind me and see her one last time in the rust of spaces left between us
I know she will not see this, I'm just a bleeding creature...
So whisper feels like forever
...Leave it

© 2017 Silente-Write


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okay I wrote a song about twenty five years ago and reading this made me remember it its a bit sketchy in my sketchy bunny mind but.....
Woke up this morning,
got out of bed
evenings pleasure
drove in my head
don't know what I'm doing
maybe Ill find a job...
oh i can see now
I'll just pack my things and go
(refrain thing)
Life would be better
these things I'm sure I'll know
the Lowcale solution

okay you can go back to your regularly scheduled program :)

I say this partly of the intention of the write and partly because this reads like a song and like my song it sounds like a very happy tune but it is full of unhappy things in a sort of sardonic looney tunes melody
like my locale solution isn't one in dieting (change your lifestyle not your caloric intake!) and (change how you live not where you live and moving) to cure your ills neither is your write of blight and you scream it as such with a sublime beauty in that wonderful voice of yours. Oh yeah I love that you use mourning like me you are one sexy writer silent:) the the the the thats all the bunny has to say:)

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

7 Months Ago

A nice ditty, my friend...
Thanks for it, aha
Morning
Mourning
...Who co.. read more



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okay I wrote a song about twenty five years ago and reading this made me remember it its a bit sketchy in my sketchy bunny mind but.....
Woke up this morning,
got out of bed
evenings pleasure
drove in my head
don't know what I'm doing
maybe Ill find a job...
oh i can see now
I'll just pack my things and go
(refrain thing)
Life would be better
these things I'm sure I'll know
the Lowcale solution

okay you can go back to your regularly scheduled program :)

I say this partly of the intention of the write and partly because this reads like a song and like my song it sounds like a very happy tune but it is full of unhappy things in a sort of sardonic looney tunes melody
like my locale solution isn't one in dieting (change your lifestyle not your caloric intake!) and (change how you live not where you live and moving) to cure your ills neither is your write of blight and you scream it as such with a sublime beauty in that wonderful voice of yours. Oh yeah I love that you use mourning like me you are one sexy writer silent:) the the the the thats all the bunny has to say:)

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

7 Months Ago

A nice ditty, my friend...
Thanks for it, aha
Morning
Mourning
...Who co.. read more
Separation, break ups with loved ones, be they others, or parts of ourselves, by death or design, are eternal, or so they seem. And I thank you for giving words to the impossible emotion :-). added to my favorites.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

7 Months Ago

Another sweet comment, Mary, thank you so much...!
Glad you enjoyed it, and never impossible<.. read more
When you are mourning a break up it does seem like forever. So does December with its cold and grey (at least where I come from). Poignant piece, but we survive and eventually move on. Nicely conveyed lines and expression.

Chris

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

7 Months Ago

Actually re-writing this one for a national song contest i HOPE to place well in...
Thanks s.. read more
Christine Anne Shaw

7 Months Ago

Good luck with the contest!
Silente-Write

7 Months Ago

Tank'z you!
Filled my heart with sadness while reading. writing with emotion doesn't mean much unless the reader is feeling it. Thumbs up.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

8 Months Ago

Thanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while.
Diane

8 Months Ago

no problem, i do the same thing.
Silente-Write

8 Months Ago

Glad I am not the only one, then
"just a bleeding creature"at the end ..points out the pain and just how intense the emotions truly run .a poignant piece so well expressed and written

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

8 Months Ago

Thanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while.
I rated it high because I can feel the pain of this poem

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

2 Years Ago

The pain is what spurred it... Thank you, Dennis
Dennis N. K

2 Years Ago

Always welcome
"I stare behind me and see her one last time in the rust of spaces left between us."

Extraordinary line one could get lost in. This is my first of your's, and feel moved to read more.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

2 Years Ago

Oh, well thank you, Kelly... That means a lot coming from a writer such as yourself... I liked that .. read more
There was a sad longing written here...but then again the will of a survivor coming through. That seems to be a pervading theme in your work, that you are a survivor. Here's to making it through all the tough times to better days ahead. I enjoyed the read.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

2 Years Ago

A keen eye, friend... Have certainly had some tough times... But what are tough times but hotter fir.. read more
You're gifted silente! I love reading your work

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

2 Years Ago

Thanks ever so much, Jiya...! I love people reading my work! So fancy that...
this is one of the most straight forward poems of yours i have read so far...i like that you have mixed your enigmatic flare with the concrete ..i feel the pain of it ...especially engaged by "...a bong hit of infinity" ..fantastic says i! and the seeing one last time in closing is sublime the way you put it ... "i'm just a bleeding creature..." is killer in the vulnerable state of your protagonist ...moves my heart out in empathy :(
E.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

2 Years Ago

Thank you muchly, Noodle of Einstein... It felt that way when writing it, and am glad to know it evo.. read more
  Fran Marie

8 Months Ago

not a problem..good to see you back..
Silente-Write

8 Months Ago

Thanks so much

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Denver, CO



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