Weeping Eyes

The vacant look in her ocean eyes

Gazing up at star-speckled skies…

She sings,

But will never weep.

She closes her eyes,

But never finds sleep.

 

The vacant look in her lover’s eyes,

Star-speckled night skies…

His eyes are open,

But he forever sleeps.

He never sings,

But never weeps.

Reviews

[The Analog Kid]

The repetition works well here. The rhymes are well done. Sad yet beautifully done.

[zainul]

Lovely piece.
Amazing contrasts of two persons on several points:sing,sleep,opening of eyes
Both never weep
Some mystery,immense beauty!

[Wakeofahero]

Loved it

[Alex]

Great!!!!!!!!

[Violet Dreams...]

Deep! beautiful

[CHRIS ANDES]

absolutely dark
=]

[The Wave]

I love your pen name and mine are similar:) Very poignant and beautiful. My boyfriend writes like this....so poetic...

[Lydia]

This is amazing! Such a beautiful write!

[Crazy Cat Man]

touching piece. very poetic

[SUGATA M]

This is very touchy