~ There Where the Trees Danced

~ There Where the Trees Danced, Elisa Laura, E.L. Fantasy, Other Dimensions, Fiction, Free style

~ There Where the Trees Danced

 

 

Yes  finally ...

 

 

There was light, after days of darkness

An early morning sun, smiled

 

 

                       The fog became a soft cotton blanket

                       The trees awoke with every sparkling

 

 

Slow movements, and limbs

The time delay in all presence

 

 

                       There was more oxygen, we survived

                       Did we? awakened from a dark wandering

 

 

Without gravity, or am I dreaming?

The trees seem to dance, without roots

 

 

                        I wonder where we are, where are we?

                        In mind? or reality?

 

 

There Where the Trees Danced

I felt your hand in mine...

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Thanks for your entry... ;) xx

Reviews

[Kristallo]

This one flows with such harmony, and the imagery here is profoundly beautiful. "The trees awoke with every sparkling" is such a tender line, each couplet is sublime and visually tasteful. Each couplet is as artistically satisfying as the one preceding it, although I would have liked to see perhaps one more addition, it seemed to end so abruptly. But this was utopia in words. Very rhythmic and lovely. Great write.

Thank you so much dear Kristallo, I am so pleased you enjoyed this, and found it visually tasteful, it was my intention to make real imagery and kind of "film fragments" to my readers, I'm glad you said that. I will think of another more addition, thanks for suggesting me that. I'm grateful with your presence here. Thanks again :) - Elisa

[Renée]

Nicely interpreted E l ! Perfect ! & Spring !

Thank you for your thoughts, Renée, always a pleasure! : )

[Renée]

that it is Dear Elisa ( :

xo :)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

you never cease to amaze me with your captivating approach to poetry, this is simply beautiful

Holland thanks you London, love your words x

[Larry Dyson]

nice music-o nice I borrowed it for my home page..ty EL

Ah yes, feel free to my friend... glad the music could touch you!

[Brianna Brie]

I love the layout of your words. It just adds to the playful way the trees dance care free and light. I can imagine myself in this mysterious place, and perhaps, a time or two I was there. Enchanting poem!

Thank you for a most wonderful review dear Brianna. :)

[Ken Simm.]

I would love to animate this. Which is down completely to the strength and beauty of the writing.

Ah Ken, thanks a lot, why not? :) feel free to animate it..... tell me how it goes, if you decide to do it :) such a pleasure to have you by my friend...

[icelandicblue]

Your poem is simply breathtaking. The beauty in it feels magical and ancient. I feel that I am peering into a scene never before witnessed by outsiders. To dance without roots, to be free, to live. Your words dance into my heart and echo in my mind.

Thank you beautiful woman! glad I could echo with you :)

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Amazing. The last two lines are just astounding.

Thanks for your time and review Mehak! :)

[Pax]

the first stanza made me thought of my fav song of florence + the machine... "its always the darkess before the dawn" ~ a possitive outcome after the dark period, will always brings a new dawn for a start of a new day... the second stanza made me think of the amazing sight of a foggy mornings, a soft breeze of cold mornings... an awakening of the soul... the third stanza made me feel the slow growth of the everyday us, the comparison of the tree to us is very much the same in terms of how we grow as a person and the tree as it blooms it wonderful branches and leaves... the fourth stanza made me realized something about these dark wonderings... on how the three are slowly dying... in our own very hands... how sad... the fifth stanza made me daydream about the days where i walk in nature's soft breeze... a beautiful dance of each branches... the soft whisper of the leaves swaying as if its part of the winds rhythm... the sixth stanza made me live in the fantasy of my thoughts... on how we swim in reality and in our thoughts... dreaming... the last stanza made me smile all the way to my eye..lol... joking... but it made me smile as the trees dance in your words...

amazing one dearest friend...
i also dance in your words...

Wow dear, I like your interpretations on this piece, thank you so much for taking the time, to make them merge with your thoughts.... xx

[Pax]

I'm so glad you liked it.... :) your always welcome dearest friend...

[Distant horizons]

Beautiful images in your words, as ever Elisa. Coming out of darkness into a surreal beauty, not knowing where you are, but knowing that hand is there for you. Bravo.

Thank you Green Mountain, I felt a bit Spacey today ;) (x)

[Distant horizons]

Ah, nothing wrong with that tulip, most days people would consider me a space cadet :-)

Ha! I see it infront of me.... that would suit you ;-)

[Distant horizons]

:-)

[Androglossia]

This is breathtaking! Your words are fantastically woven together taking readers into that dreamlike world you so beautifully created.

The picture is mezmerizing and is perfect for the piece. The last two lines were awesome!

Oh my dear, I feel so honored with your words, :) especially coming from you :) thankies love x

[Androglossia]

You're very welcome, my dear!

(((Smiling)))