~ There Where the Trees Danced

~ There Where the Trees Danced, Elisa Laura, E.L. Fantasy, Other Dimensions, Fiction, Free style

~ There Where the Trees Danced

 

 

Yes  finally ...

 

 

There was light, after days of darkness

An early morning sun, smiled

 

 

                       The fog became a soft cotton blanket

                       The trees awoke with every sparkling

 

 

Slow movements, and limbs

The time delay in all presence

 

 

                       There was more oxygen, we survived

                       Did we? awakened from a dark wandering

 

 

Without gravity, or am I dreaming?

The trees seem to dance, without roots

 

 

                        I wonder where we are, where are we?

                        In mind? or reality?

 

 

There Where the Trees Danced

I felt your hand in mine...

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Thanks for your entry... ;) xx

Reviews

[Kristallo]

This one flows with such harmony, and the imagery here is profoundly beautiful. "The trees awoke with every sparkling" is such a tender line, each couplet is sublime and visually tasteful. Each couplet is as artistically satisfying as the one preceding it, although I would have liked to see perhaps one more addition, it seemed to end so abruptly. But this was utopia in words. Very rhythmic and lovely. Great write.

Thank you so much dear Kristallo, I am so pleased you enjoyed this, and found it visually tasteful, it was my intention to make real imagery and kind of "film fragments" to my readers, I'm glad you said that. I will think of another more addition, thanks for suggesting me that. I'm grateful with your presence here. Thanks again :) - Elisa

[Lover Of Words]

words like the tone of music love it

Thank you so much Kelsey.

[Lover Of Words]

My pleasure love

[Stella Armour]

very visual, beautiful imagery of the trees slowly dancing in a dreamlike state.I feel you coming out from the shadows into the light hand in hand with your soul mate in complete serenity, lovely penning.

Thank you very much kind lady! for this lovely review !

[Jake Botha]

Evokes the perfect feeling of a dreamlike state.

Thank you very much for your visit!!

[Tree]

Eerily haunting. Like a dream where the participates are dancing within an enchanted forrest. Your music added to the surrealistic quality of the poem. A dream indeed. Also thought your structuring was good, Elli. It lent itself to the poem and enhanced what you were trying to do. Good work, poetess.

Diego

Thank you so much sweet poet, for your time, and words... I was in doubt about adding more stanza's to the piece, but I guess, I leave it like this... :) your words always bring a smile on my face, till soon, when my flu is out of my body xo

[s y e]

Loved the structure of this, the video was amazing, I love the way you write, imagery is amazing and breath taking in all your writes, you're amazing! xox

Aw, don't know what to say lol, you humble me with your lovely words sweetie, thank you tons, xoxoxo

[s y e]

Haha, m pleasure, you're amazing! xoxoxo

So are you!!!! :) sweet Scottish girl! :))))

[s y e]

Hah, thank you sweetness :-D

[Sugar Plum ♥]

the feeling of dance and delight is so familiar in spring! I love the air and that is my favorite season, the nature is awaking from the deep sleep, I love the dancing trees, you describe in so beautifu way!
{nia}
02.04.13

A dream to be awaken in, after a trip out of space... thank you nia... xxx

[CookieDough]

Echt heel mooi! en mooie muziek erbij. Helemaal top!

Dank je wel, echt... dit was een stuk dat in me opkwam nadat ik een droom had... zo zijn er meerdere van mij... vertaal het altijd in poëzie.... bedankt voor je woorden! - x Elisa

[CookieDough]

Geen probleem en dat vind ik juist heel moeilijk, mijn dromen verwoorden in een gedicht. x

Is het eigenlijk ook hoor, best lastig, ik houdt een droomdagboek bij, sinds ik heel erge dromen heb soms... goede en slechte zeg maar... ik ga nu je andere gedicht lezen, leuk! :) x

[CookieDough]

Oke dat is wel een goed idee!;p En oke haha dankjewel x

Graag gedaan! :) altijd! x

[h d e rushin]

Kristallo is God, so she is right. This does flow with great harmony and grace.
There's a pear tree in my yard that takes a different shape each spring.
I am waiting for the woman to emerge...

Good work,
dana

dana dear coming from you means a lot.... beautiful how you word this, and see some woman in your tree.... thank you.

[lost girl]

MMMmmm....in all my dreams it has never been so apparent but here in yours I have seen the clarity. I have a supreme fascination with trees...all shapes, sizes, colors....I love to watch their wind dances. It amazes me how many years they can go through total absence then fullness again with out much fuss. I adore the pic you have posted along with your writing. You are such a Master!

Thank you seeker, yes, I can shake hands with you then, I have often dreams about trees, they always have something mystical, and mysterious... thank you for these words dear friend, I'm honored to have you by...

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem. I would like to see the tree dance. I believe I saw the tree dance once in Georgia. My Army unit was near a tornado going down the highway. Your tree dance is much better. Amazing description led reader to good places and thoughts. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Thank you so much dear friend... Nice you tell me your stories...