No More Heartbreak

No More Heartbreak

A Poem by Amandaaa Caroline (:
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Just.. Writing. About.. Stuff. So yeah, tell me what you think.

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I have poured my heart out,

My secrets have all been told,

I thought I was special,

You acted like I was gold.

 

That's the problem though,

It was all just an act,

My tears started streaming,

Couldn't help but react.

 

Many times over,

My heart has been broken,

My heart has been stolen,

And kept as a token.

 

I thought I was in love,

But I was completely wrong,

I feel stupid now,

Should've seen it all along.

 

It took true love, though,

To help me realize my mistake,

No longer will I fall for it,

Hopefully no more heartbreak.

© 2013 Amandaaa Caroline (:


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such a sweet and wonderfully constructed write, this is an improvement over previous writes...so much more real emotion and not as much unconnected feeling. i think you need to keep writing and hone your skills, because there is a flame of talent burning within you which should not be denied. well done, Amandaaa!!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Thank you!


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As soon as I read: "You acted like I was gold." I knew the dude that caused your heartbreak was a huge @$$hole for making that go into past tense. Good read, I liked it. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Hahaah, thank you Daniel (:
Daniel

7 Years Ago

welcome
You go Girl, and take the pain of this relationship and learn from it!! You can be happy....keep searching for that person who is just right for you! You deserve it!!
You have been able to convey the emotion of heartbreak in a way that touches the reader!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much (:
Love is hard

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Amen to that.
I enjoyed this grately thank you.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Haha, thank you (:
Chris

7 Years Ago

Your welcome miss your very welcome
This was filled with emotion, and I liked it a lot. Love will not always end in heartbreak, you just have to learn to be less naive and quick with it. Infatuation is very often perceived as "true everlasting love". I'm not saying that this is the case here, but it is very common. You learn after that stage has passed whether you are truly in love with someone. Sick people play with emotions. It saddens and angers me whenever I hear of that happening, and that is unfortunately very often. Anyways, a very good emotional write. Clearly from the heart.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much, that means a lot to me.
This was really well written! I also hope you dont ever have anymore heart beak!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Thank you (:
I love it. Very true. I love how you tell it like it is. Good job.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Hahah, thank you (:
Be myself!

7 Years Ago

Your welcome
I enjoyed the rhyming pattern the most in this poem. Great Job with that. And I liked the way u expressed how this person was feeling it makes it....well awesome!!!Good Job with this:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Hahah, thank you.
Angelic_Dreamer

7 Years Ago

ur welcome
Lovely. The emotion was so raw! This was really well written!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much (:
s y e

7 Years Ago

Welcome1
such a sweet and wonderfully constructed write, this is an improvement over previous writes...so much more real emotion and not as much unconnected feeling. i think you need to keep writing and hone your skills, because there is a flame of talent burning within you which should not be denied. well done, Amandaaa!!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Amandaaa Caroline (:

7 Years Ago

Thank you!

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