...But you won't.

...But you won't.

A Poem by Naomi Roseღ

  I want to hug you.

  I want you to kiss
  away my tears.

  I want you to 
  love me.

  I want you to 
  be mine.

  But you won't.

  You never will.

© 2011 Naomi Roseღ


Author's Note

Naomi Roseღ
Short & pretty fucking awful.

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TJ
You're self deprication reminds me of me :). I don't know why writers have come to think that short is synonomous with bad when it's just the opposite: an overly wordy writer tends to be a bad one and writers who gets across there point eloquently and CONCISELY tend to be the better ones. With this short, sweet piece you managed to get across the conflicting feelings of loving someone yet feeling pain bc you know you can never have them. It I felt bad for the subject of the poem and when you can evoke emotion in your readers you know you've succeeded

Posted 12 Years Ago


Those wide open dreams do happen. I could tell you stories where I decided friendship was good enough and things felled into place. A short poem with hope and fear as the message. A very good poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


Great job! I love the emotions:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


I agree entirerly with Vanessa Rico!!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


You poured your emotions into this poem; thus, it could never be awful. Your emotions are raw and pure and you have made me feel them! Great job!

Posted 12 Years Ago


I don't think it's awful! In fact, I think it's lovely. It holds a pleasant amount of hurt sorrow in it.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Short, with meaning. Driven by hurt, compelled by the waves crashing in of heart song melodious hope even when depressed. Maybe there isn't a chance for the two of you in particular, but there's always another door opening for someone else.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Short & powerful is more like it. Doesn't matter how much you say, it is the way you say it. Very well said, indeed. -S...

Posted 12 Years Ago


It's not awful, it's inspiring and beautiful. I feel the emotion within this, as one hopes to love another, but there is always a barrier between the two lovers. So romantic and sad. Great job!

Posted 12 Years Ago



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