Look at her

Look at her

A Poem by frozensakura

Look at her
Cut up, broken
Abandoned

Look at her
Cry and scream
Clawing at her face
What a disgrace

"how beautiful"
"your so cute"
look again in the damn mirror
It always proves you wrong

The girl they see
She's nothing like me
Why can't they tell us apart?

Is being free
Such a tragedy 
I guess that's what they mean

© 2012 frozensakura


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A lot of easily connectable emotion here. I, myself, can relate all too well. I can't really take compliments myself.

However, just to be constructive (not destructive, I promise) I would like to see the sentences in the quotations start off capitalized and using the proper English spelling. ( i.e You're instead of your) I don't really like text typing in anyplace other then texting but I'm just old fashioned I guess.

Beautifully written though. Good job girls!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.



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A lot of easily connectable emotion here. I, myself, can relate all too well. I can't really take compliments myself.

However, just to be constructive (not destructive, I promise) I would like to see the sentences in the quotations start off capitalized and using the proper English spelling. ( i.e You're instead of your) I don't really like text typing in anyplace other then texting but I'm just old fashioned I guess.

Beautifully written though. Good job girls!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

short yet powerful. i guess this is what poets are for. looking in and beyond reality. very good :) keep it up :)) i'm really glad to know such wonderful writers here

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a rather well written poem! I love the subject you chose to write about and how well you express that emotion of sadness for this "her".
Good job!
-Penelope H.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This speaks about what most girls and even some guys go through. People just wanting to be themselves, but too caught up in what everyone else says to even try. It is hard to step away from that, but I hope that you do not feel the need to be someone other than who you want to be.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Inner beauty is very hard to find for any of us. You did a wonderful job writing this, thank you for sharing.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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*reads title*
ME: What? Why are you looking at me? *gasps* :O Do I have boogie on my face?????

*reads on*

ME: Who's that sexy girl I see???? *puts down mirror and walks away with confidence*

XD Sorry I had to say that but serisoulsy, this was a wicked poem, it can really relate to a girl's or even a dude's life. AWESOME!

Posted 7 Years Ago


frozensakura

7 Years Ago

thanks !!
Wow Athena, it's really good. So many young women put on masks, go for popularity and are just cruel. But sometimes some of them may feel this way. Great work!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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frozensakura

7 Years Ago

Thanks !!
Why can't i write like this

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Wow this is powerful.
Great job I can feel the energy from this!
Keep on doing your thing!

Posted 7 Years Ago


frozensakura

7 Years Ago

Thanks !!

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