Prophecy of Shadows

In times to come expect these signs,

Read them here within these lines,

Know that all must pay the fines,

So why do you defend the crimes?

 

The rivers of blood,  the hills of tears,

The forests of death,  the mountains of fears,

TheBlack eyes, the bloodstained swords,

The Broken trust, the empty words.

 

The kings fall, the years kiss the past,

The cities burn, the people rule at last,

The angel of death, the angel of sin,

The lost names, the song of the midnight wind.

 

Children scream, the lost mother's soul,

Evil grins, the evil grows,

Strong men weeps, the wise men sighs,

Evil is king, the crown of lies.

 

Darkness grows, hope fades away,

Hundred souls, Death kneels to pray,

A punishment for sin, the good men die,

Word of the prophet, the sign in the sky.

 

Evil look up! Evil beware!

Good can win, evil you swear,

a debt of blood, but the end has come;

Evil frowns, it's time is done.

Author's Note

I wrote this about the end of the world, and how evil will vanish! Something to hope for! My brother (the one who wrfote The Dance) helped me with the first stanza!:)

Reviews

[R.G. Bennet]

Very powerful. The tone of this piece reminded me somewhat of Yeat's "The Second Coming". My favourite part was the imagery in:

"The rivers of blood, the hills of tears,
The forests of death, the mountains of fears,"

I also love your line "Death kneels to pray".

Excellently done. Thanks for writing.

[Adabelle Davis]

It's brilliantly written! Great imagery, good rhyming and impacting message.

[E. Ryan Miller]

Favorite line? "Hundred souls, Death kneels to pray". It's really beautiful.
Overall, I just really like this poem. You rhyme nicely, and break out nicely in some places, too. The thoughts are eloquent.

[ravenjess]

Awesome poem!!! Loved the whole thing!

[Coyote Poetry]

I believe if we don't change our ways. Our end will be worst then in the poem. Like a Mad Max type world ending where the strong where control what is left. I like your description and story in the poem. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[The Scholar]

Wow this is incredible! I love the imagery, the personification, and the quick pace to the poem. It's like I can hear ominous drums beating in the background!

I don't know if you want any suggestions, but if you do, I have but one. :)
In the last stanza, because of your personification of Evil, you could capitalize the word "evil" in the second line. And then in the last line, you could say "his" rather than "its." So it'd go like this:

Evil look up! Evil beware!
Good can win, Evil you swear,
a debt of blood, but the end has come;
Evil frowns, his time is done.

Then of course, you would have to capitalize evil throughout the play (in stanza four, line 2, you could say something like, "Evil grins, then/and Evil grows."

Anyways, idk it just would be cool to see 'Evil' portrayed as a kind of human being. Of course, you definitely do not have to take my idea if you don't want to. I'm just spilling my thoughts.

Great work again! One of the best poems I've read in a while (perhaps I'm biased because I adore rhyme, but . . . who can say?).

Sorry to ramble . . . amazing poem! Well done!!

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

Great job, Bridget! I love the first and fourth stanzas, especially, the imagery you used there are fantastic. Awesome poem.