Salt On Open Wounds

Those nine carat gold hoops

twisted with betrayal

have remained unused and pushed

in their satin lined, expensive

salt on open wounds leather case

to the back of a dark drawer

where they'll stay buried forever.

When he presented them to her,

he would have seen the expression in her eyes.

"I bought them with you in mind", he said.

But she in her infinite wisdom replied,

"You did nothing of the kind,

you'd be a fool if you think my eyes 

are blind to your treachery".

Reviews

[Lorry]

Ouch! Typical amateur mistake Chris, should have buried him in the back of a dark drawer instead.
The selfishness of the male ego knows no bounds. I am ashamed to be a part of that species sometimes....but then again, im usually just grateful that some woman hasn't decided to kill me, yet.
I might not deserve it for that reason, but im probably guilty of something.
It really is a wonder you've not all gone lesbian when uou look at the mounting evidence that we are indeed from mars.

[Chris Shaw]

Men are from Mars, Women from Venus and inbetween us the Planet Penis. That's what it all boils down to Lorry. Come to think of it, there do appear to be more lesbians around these days. I haven't gone that far yet :) Love your review. I also do like men despite the faults of some.

Chris

[Lorry]

Trump would make a great president of planet penis, being the biggest dick on this planet :)

[Chris Shaw]

I can 't argue with you there. You are giving me some ideas for a possible poem :)

[Stella Armour]

Men! never grow up do they ?

Still give that little boy look and think it will absolve them of everything... :)

[Chris Shaw]

Stella, all I am going to say is that you are a wise woman. Thanks for checking in :)

[john l smith]

If it were not for that 'planet in between us' would these little nasties still occur?
Haven't heard that before
Very Funny
Oh!, Great poem, that dirty rat!!

[Chris Shaw]

Oh Dave you liked my little response to Lorry? Yes, I couldn't resist it. In fact I would like to turn it into a proper poem. I thought it was funny too :)

Chris

[john l smith]

it definitely begs for poetic status.
If I had come across that by legal means I would take the opportunity
there is a book?

[Onlyme]

A woman scorned by a man she loved. Expressed to perfection with guilt token he gave her. To make him feel better. Nice one Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Dawn. There's mighty power in words. Hope you are OK.

Chris

[Onlyme]

Iam good thanks hope you are too?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

lies may sit in the back of the drawer, but no matter how long we conceal them...once they get out and are worn...they are still lies.
intense emotion conveyed here.
a matter of fact, in your face write...
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Jacob. No earrings are better than betrayal ones.

Chris

[R.J Calzonetti (Siniste..]

Emotion shattered throughout the poem. I'm happy I got the chance to read it. Without rhymes, not relying heavily on imagery, but still so strong. I loved fact that these words cut so deep. Congrats on a great poem!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Jack. Pleased to see you here.

Chris

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Wow this flowing free verse is deep and filled with brittle, angry animosity. It is descriptive and the dialogue gives it the feel of voyeurism.

[Chris Shaw]

Hell hath no fury and all that. Yes the anger was in the lines and meant to be. Thank you John.
read moreHell hath no fury and all that. Yes the anger was in the lines and meant to be. Thank you John.

Chris