The untold truth

What would be considered told from my mouth

Is considered hidden by whispers

Nothing is said to be free anymore

It all commons back with a fire

To claim my life in sweet sorrow

But even the truth holds lies

When nothing is said i pay

For it may be true

But what does it matter to you

I'll lay there in that bed

Drowning in the pity of death

And with the sleep comes a new meaning to life

As the brain loses life the heart loses beat

And in that I become silenced

Everything I ever said was all of the memories that brought my pain

With one bit of happiness laying in the thorns

It never got told to you

It lays there as the untold truth

My untold truth of love for you

Reviews

[Shy Girl]

Hidden affection...I love this piece. It ends so softly...breaking it all down to that one thought of your untold truth. I abso loved this :)

[BrittBratt]

I enjoyed that alot, thank you for sharing :)

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Okay first off, fitting poem.

Love this part, how you described this:
"What would be considered told from my mouth
Is considered hidden by whispers"

Awesome!
"Nothing is said to be free anymore"

"fire" ... "sweet sorrow" love the words you used here:
"It all commons back with a fire
To claim my life in sweet sorrow"

So true:
"But even the truth holds lies"

Powerful emotion:
"But what does it matter to you
I'll lay there in that bed
Drowning in the pity of death"

I love this line:
"And in that I become silenced"
very fitting after these 2 lines...
"And with the sleep comes a new meaning to life
As the brain loses life the heart loses beat"

Wow... love this line:
"Everything I ever said was all of the memories that brought my pain"

Fitting ending, touching, emotional. Nice write, I really like and enjoyed this.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the thoughts in the poem. Many could open the door to discussions with different answers for each life. Some truth can never be spoken. Passed the time when a action or word mean anything anymore. I like the emotion of the poem. Direct and honest. A excellent poem.
Coyote