A Wish

A Wish

A Poem by Devanshu Rajput
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hope you would enjoy my best piece written so far.......

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My useless body, looks outside the window.


Sees the pleasant nature, 


comes a wish to run across the velvet grass.


The lovely rain makes me jealous,


 of children splashing in the puddles.


Once I want to wander,


 explore the fragrant flowers and the nectar fetching


 butterflies, in my garden.


The silent four corners of my room,


 reflect my helplessness and ask, 


 can my cursed body ever go out of the window?


The one who hears my unheard pain is the bed on which


 my body lies,


 since the time immemorial.


 

 

© 2015 Devanshu Rajput


Author's Note

Devanshu Rajput
Thanks for reading.

Image credits goes to Google and http://www.flickr.com/photos/[email protected]/6830788957

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Dear Devanshu

It is with absolute joy I welcome you to this website.

I am simply another aspiring writer on here and I like reviewing the words of others.

Firstly, you are very young. The internet can be a dangerous place. Take your brother's advice and help, to use it well as you are doing here.

I looked at your profile and could easily roll back the years and see a commonality in interest in the writers you like. In fact I still admire them to this day.

I praise your passion for writing.

I can see already much talent from this beautifully composed piece which celebrates the beauty of the world and nature, whilst boxed in a bedroom , when you want to be out there and enjoy it.

Some of my writing is accessible to all and some is restricted to those who are over 18.

Such are the demands of maturity.

Please may I ask you one thing?

Please keep up your passion for writing and stay on this site, which I consider a secure environment so that we can all enjoy your well constructed words and see the world as you see it for the betterment of us all.

I have a notion at 14 that you can teach me more about life and perception than I could ever teach you at 53.

Be encouraged.

I loved this piece and its perfect simplicity.

Please do not worry about reading my writing. Some of it will be restricted.

I do not require your review, just that you keep a free spirit, an open mind and teach us all .

With my warm regards


James

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

thank for your response ! I would certainly consider your advice.I love people of guidance and boost.. read more



Reviews

Wow this was so full of emotion and so deep this poem has so much meaning to it.
All explaining how a sick person feels how there life would be. Them wanting to see the outside world, but only being able to look from the inside, never to leave there bed. This is a sad but good piece.
Well written indeed.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Beautiful write. To enjoy the nature and childhood again is my wish too. Well written. Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


A MASTERPIECE!!!:)Amazing...

Posted 7 Years Ago


Arunima

7 Years Ago

Again!!;p
Devanshu Rajput

7 Years Ago

Its my style.

Devanshu
Arunima

7 Years Ago

Oye,hoye!!:) :)
I like it very much. It's deeply description about nature and hope. It's wonderful poem. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

7 Years Ago

I am glad you liked it. Thanks for stopping by.

Devanshu
This reads as though the person is restricted by something like agoraphobia. You capture the desperate longing and appreciation for the small things we all take for granted, until we cannot have them anymore, very well.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

7 Years Ago

Thanks, I am glad I was able to deliver my message.

Thanks for stopping by.
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A true Poem of the regrets one always has, be it one who is physically handicapped or spiritually disturbed. Time wasted does not come again and in today's world, time is always wasted. Every person always has some regret which sooner or later piles up on them like unread books. I enjoyed the read. The poem talks about the desire of a physically challenged person, to go out and enjoy nature, to be able to run through the thin long grass... Great poem. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

7 Years Ago

Thanks Paari. It is really the case. Time and tide waits for none.

Devanshu
a great poem my friend,you walked me through your lovely garden

Posted 7 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

7 Years Ago

Thanks for your kind words.

Devanshu
 wordman

7 Years Ago

my pleasure
I had a friend, now deceased, who lost one of his legs to diabetes. He was so determined to continue living and still got around in his wheelchair and on crutches. Your protagonist seems to have given up on these pursuits, such a sad and helpless feeling. It makes me want to make him a cup of tea and try to bring some joy. I've read 5 or 6 of your posts and they were almost all sad and defeatist. I feel you could use a cup of tea too. Try some of my posts, I'm pretty upbeat.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

7 Years Ago

I had written it seeing a person who who was a child of lesser God. I am not a that sort of person. .. read more
I think that this piece is the best that you have ever written. I say this with honesty. Be proud of what you have accomplished.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

7 Years Ago

Thanks again. I have got incredible number of reviews by you.

Thanks again, for all .. read more
Hi Dev really proud :) your writing is mature way beyond to your age. All the very best . i hope i too can write something like this some day. Long way to go though

Posted 7 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

7 Years Ago

Thanks rkiyer. Life is what is all about. We need to spare sometime over the children of God.
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rkiyer

7 Years Ago

Very Correct

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