A Wish

hope you would enjoy my best piece written so far.......

My useless body, looks outside the window.

Sees the pleasant nature, 

comes a wish to run across the velvet grass.

The lovely rain makes me jealous,

 of children splashing in the puddles.

Once I want to wander,

 explore the fragrant flowers and the nectar fetching

 butterflies, in my garden.

The silent four corners of my room,

 reflect my helplessness and ask, 

 can my cursed body ever go out of the window?

The one who hears my unheard pain is the bed on which

 my body lies,

 since the time immemorial.

 

 

Author's Note

Thanks for reading.

Image credits goes to Google and http://www.flickr.com/photos/46987892@N05/6830788957

Reviews

[James Hanna-Magill]

Dear Devanshu

It is with absolute joy I welcome you to this website.

I am simply another aspiring writer on here and I like reviewing the words of others.

Firstly, you are very young. The internet can be a dangerous place. Take your brother's advice and help, to use it well as you are doing here.

I looked at your profile and could easily roll back the years and see a commonality in interest in the writers you like. In fact I still admire them to this day.

I praise your passion for writing.

I can see already much talent from this beautifully composed piece which celebrates the beauty of the world and nature, whilst boxed in a bedroom , when you want to be out there and enjoy it.

Some of my writing is accessible to all and some is restricted to those who are over 18.

Such are the demands of maturity.

Please may I ask you one thing?

Please keep up your passion for writing and stay on this site, which I consider a secure environment so that we can all enjoy your well constructed words and see the world as you see it for the betterment of us all.

I have a notion at 14 that you can teach me more about life and perception than I could ever teach you at 53.

Be encouraged.

I loved this piece and its perfect simplicity.

Please do not worry about reading my writing. Some of it will be restricted.

I do not require your review, just that you keep a free spirit, an open mind and teach us all .

With my warm regards


James

[Devanshu Rajput]

thank for your response ! I would certainly consider your advice.I love people of guidance and boosting confidence, because I know this is how I will learn.

Take Care!

[Deepika]

This is a very susceptible situation where one has mountain-high dreams but is confined within a limited cage. Deep and Intense write! (y)

[Devanshu Rajput]

I am glad that you attributed your time on my piece.....Your words are really helpful....
read moreI am glad that you attributed your time on my piece.....Your words are really helpful....

Devanshu

[Miss Sharon]

This is a powerful and well written prose poem Devanshu. I can feel the turmoil and pain you expressed so poignantly. Please continue to write because I feel that you have a gift for expression. ~Sharon

[Devanshu Rajput]

I will Miss Sharon. And, thanks for your kind words.........

[Miss Sharon]

You are very welcome! ~Sharon

[ANTO]

You give us a glimpse of what it must be like to not be able to access nature - something that many of us take for granted. It is a humbling lesson. thank you Devanshu

[zainul]

This is a wonderful piece.
The crave for exploring the beauty of nature is amazing.
Enjoyed reading.

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks for the review.

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks for the review.

[zainul]

This is all my pleasure.:)

[rohit sapra]

To be honest I cannot even believe myself that a 15 year old guy can write so well. Totally amazing....Loved Every word of it. Actually, I feel the pain hidden in this poem also.

[Devanshu Rajput]

thank you so much :)

[rohit sapra]

Your Welcome. Just expressed the truth.

[annabellee]

wow this is really gorgoeous. Great images. Well penned :)

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[annabellee]

you're most welcome :)

[Joan*Eckhart]

This was amazing, beautiful. Well done.

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks

[AWickedMoon]

A beautiful poem of longing. I agree this is one of your best.
-Wicked

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks for the kind words :)

[Sami Khalil]

"Once I want to wander,

explore the fragrant flowers and the nectar fetching

butterflies, in my garden.

The silent four corners of my room,"
That is some good poetry...Pen on...:)

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Wórdsmíth]

well written

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks