two alones

two alones

fall into the starving

bodies touch the diminishing air

we cough into each other's dimension

die kissing the devil

as he laughs watching lovers

expose

to the rain

lust for the drops

quench their hunger

they would eat storms

to be sated

two alones

starving

is a pandemic of lust

out of control

let's jump

we can attach on the way down

he's laughing

we're loving

god, the end is beautiful.

erin-cilberto

10/31/2020

Reviews

[Vari]

Pouncing breezes of love echoing oneness amidst the pandemic. Nicely done reading something unique but must say flooded with lots of thoughts. Great write. All is well if it ends well may be possible I may feel the same way when I get in such situation. Nicely penned poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Vari, let us hope that we all can be one again someday.
j.

[MomzillaNC]

Die kissing the devil
They would eat storms
to be sated
is a pandemic of lust
god, the end is beautiful.

Just… wow! And, hhhhhhhot!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Momz!
j.

[MomzillaNC]

yvw 🙂

[AJNJ]

They would eat storms. I loved that line! Its fantastic.
Death can wait but lovers cannot. Some things are just so worth the risk!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, AJNJ,
j.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

This poem has a drive the drives uphill as it's read down. The title is interestingly put. Every line is powerful and meaningful and full of feeling.

"let's jump
we can attach on the way down
he's laughing
we're loving" - this stanza was my favorite.

tyfs

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words,
Cyprian,
j.

[Corset]

we joked recently about the number of pandemic babies that will be born before its had it way and departs into the rows of files and records, everything has a beginning and an end, even if it ends with no more hosts & dies out from exposure. Are these new souls food for fodder, I don't thinks so, humans are damn near indestructible, every new version carries its own inner defense , the human body it adapts just like every disease or form of life, what doesn't kill us makes us stronger, isn't that fascinating?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, each version with its own inner defense...even if we have no outer.
thank you, Corset,read moreyes, each version with its own inner defense...even if we have no outer.
thank you, Corset,
j.

[barleygirl]

At our age, ya gotta admit, it's kinda silly to pass up an opportunity for love & passion. We acted out near-suicidal in our youth, throwing ourselves at ill-advised conjunctions, never fearing the smash-up that could follow. It's only logical that you'd compare covid to this (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, my friend...
Yes, in our youth, when our parents said we couldn't date so and so...we felt like there were two households, both alike in dignity....and we were having ours removed.
appreciate your visit Margie.
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Dramatic and powerful.
Poetry of a high order.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jimmy,
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Gay abandon writ in a flowing defiant cascade of brilliance Jacob. So many novel lines of unique metaphor!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, John,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

If your time is up I can't imagine a better way to bail out :) This is so funny Jacob. A pandemic of lust Ha ha. Reminds me of that song, if you were the only boy in the world, and I was the only girl, or it might be vice versa. I can imagine you chuckling as you penned this.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Chris....:))))