This time, last year

This time, last year

his mind,

the sharpness of

colors in contrast

crimson on downy white

turned

to all white,

like a blank page

he knew not how to fill

with words

a poem on his lips

but they wouldn't move

his eyes searching for those colors

as they assessed what life there was left

in them,

he saw me

he knew me,

sort of

acknowledged me proudly

then stared out the window

at his nothing world.

erin-cilberto

3/15/22

Reviews

[Mauricio Montoya]

I had to wonder how I would respond so I read again to understand yet lost in it meaning I had yet to read with dread that my comment would not be the same so I came to this is.loser can't find his or her way. Love poetry because I is open to interpretation of what we see.
Thank you for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I ike where you went with this, Mauricio.
Very sad when all directions lead to nowhere.
j.

[Mauricio Montoya]

It's never nowhere any action creates a reaction.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

How sad to have a "nothing world" in a world full of miracles, color and life. But it would most certainly mean death to a poet. This seems almost like a description of Alzheimer's; my most feared and dreaded of all human nemeses. Nothing is so horrifying to me as the thought of losing my mind, my memories and my soul to that vicious robber of senses. Your portrayal is painfully realistic. Wonderful writing as always. F.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Fabian,
j.

[Aluppi Jampur]

Definitely feeling this one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Chrome,
j.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Jacob, this was Beautifully written, but sad too if that makes sense! I Took care of my grand ma and then an aunt that had this awful dementia! Your poem was spot on!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, it does, thank you, Kathy...
those are rough times for loved ones.
j.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

My pleasure!

[Katarzyna Anna Koziorow..]

A beautiful, delightful poem! Your work is worthy of attention. It should definitely be appreciated. Your technique is flawless. I would be very pleased if you would comment on any of my writing. Have a great day.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate your kind words, and will be to your page very soon,'
j.

[Andrew John]

The sharpness of a mind and then a nothing world. Interesting one, Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

he was so sharp, so aware...

very hard to see him lose that.
thank you, Andrew,
j.

[Miss Sharon]

(he knew me, sort of acknowledged me proudly then stared out the window at his nothing world.) The day I visited Mom in the nursing home and she didn't know me.....was the worst day of my life. It is such a sad thing when ones' body outlives their brain. You've written these emotions well Jacob. ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we lose them before we lose them,
thank you, Sharon,
j.

[knighngale]

ohh that makes me sad. LOL. I love it, the whole description entails to a window, and nakedness, great read! love it, honey, great, great!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, knighgale,
j.

[knighngale]

most welcome, dear :D

[Betty Hermelee]

a poor soul, suffering mentally; desperate to say something meaningful, to write something to be something; your words are perfect for this setting, especially the last line. Time means nothing to those who may suffer from dementia or similar. My mother suffered and her world was colorless, except when she hallucinated, which in itself is so sad.Excellent write on an important matter.
Best, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind, understanding review, Betty,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome J.

[Lathen Griffiths]

My wife’s grandfather suffered with dementia in the last years of his life, very sad to see. A touching write Jacob.

Lathen

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Lathen,
j.