Aborted

Aborted 

 

 

 

plod along

words discouraged

from connecting

like star crossed

lovers from feuding families

 

plod along

a poet's indiscretions

directed towards averse verse

on a balcony

pleading for silence

 

purloined letters

written in sinful prose

despite the warnings

illicit delusions 

titles entombed

 

the dagger conjoins

lines with lives 

with rhymes with times

past.

there is a poem

 

but the stone in front of the womb

cannot be moved

to allow it to be born.

 

erin-cilberto

6/20/22

Reviews

[Vertigo Cat1111]

This says so much. It’s such a interesting coincidence that you wrote this mere days before, what in my opinion, was a horrid choice. Each line is a powerful slap in the face, each one a stunner and the last line wraps it up with a shiny bow. This poem brings the mind to many places, including the injustices. Thank you for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Vertigo...
j.

[John the Baptist]

Nice nods to The Bard and EAP here. Also Easter imagery at the end. I'm afraid, however, that the stone is on the wrong side of the Supreme Court.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it is definitely on the wrong side, John.
thanks for the read and comment.

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful dance of words and thoughts. Our world is changing and few saw it coming. Jacob, old law, stolen away and bringing back the 1931 laws. Can the world fall backwards my friend? Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

quite the coincidence...i wrote this a couple days before Roe V. Wade was overturned...thank you for your words, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

Good timing my friend and you are welcome Jacob.

[Sami Khalil]

An excellent poem as usual beloved poet. Many things come to mind reading this. Forbidding the marriage of words causes the injustice that happened to Romeo and Juliet.
Another one is words like to come out with the feelings in the open sun and air. If not, it is like keeping it behind stony graves of old. Sometimes rhyme and rhythm to words are like conjoined twins. You are amazing, sir Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful review, Sami,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome sir.

[redzone]

sometimes I think there is a love/hate thing with words trying to be a poem.... while the analogy beckons a Romeo and Juliet image, my weird mind took me to Ahab and his battle with the whale.... "I stabith thee in hate's sake...." and while a poet "loves" words, it is usually a battle of wills to get them to be arranged the way we want them, even disappearing on us out of spite.....

in our history, women, half of our species, have had to fight against "stones" (more like boulders) for many thousands of years now.... women were the very first slaves.... what has been encouraging to see is that since Friday there has been increasing numbers of protest and resistance in the streets against this ruling.... perhaps an analogy for the fight to write poetry?? history and poetry will be written (whether intended or not) ib the days and weeks ahead and in one way or another...

you wield a mighty poetic pen Jacob....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what a great response, Curt...thank you,
j.

[W. Barrett Munn]

I also agree with l&a below that the final stanza is a stunner.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, W. Barrett,
j.

[light and ashes]

"but the stone in front of the womb cannot move to allow it to be born," great line. As always immpressive.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, light,
j.

[light and ashes]

You are always welcome.

[W. Barrett Munn]

I like this a lot with its nods to older works of literature. I knocked on Orpheus’s door, but he wouldn’t answer kind of thing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, W.Barrett
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Took me to many places. Romeo and Juliet, the new laws re abortion in the USA which is a huge step backward in my opinion and then to trying to get those lines birthed only to find an obstruction. So much here J. How do you manage that in so few lines.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Chris...and interesting what you said...as I wrote this before that ruling came down.
j.

[Temperance]

Writer's block? Very clever way of writing about it, Mr. J. I very much like this poem. Especially, V4 the play with words was fun to read. Love the closing verse....interesting metaphor. Temp

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Temperance---
appreciate your words...
j.